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by GeniP
June 30th, 2014, 10:08 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Romantic Fantasy Query - THE ROYAL OUTLANDER
Replies: 1
Views: 6601

Re: Romantic Fantasy Query - THE ROYAL OUTLANDER

Hi Amanda, Synopses are miserable, there's no way around it. They can be effective, but cramming your whole story into a single page is ridiculously hard at best. That said, I think the best queries manage to outline the story so that the pieces make sense despite the multitude of omissions. In that...
by GeniP
June 28th, 2014, 3:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Forest and the Sea
Replies: 8
Views: 4468

Re: Query: The Forest and the Sea

Hi Wilderness. Your story sounds like it has a lot of interesting layers, probably with great thanks to your background in history. I think the prior comments pointing to Query Shark are great suggestions, as was the redline. Your current query tells us about the story from a distance (i.e. it is a ...
by GeniP
June 28th, 2014, 3:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Romantic Fantasy Query
Replies: 3
Views: 3297

Re: Romantic Fantasy Query

Hi Amanda, I think your query highlights the key conflicts in your story well, but with a little tightening, the writing could draw me into the action more rapidly. In the second line "Three years later, she is still haunted by the memories of her mysterious savior, but is unable to mention the inci...
by GeniP
June 28th, 2014, 3:09 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 282942

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Poison Apples Genre: YA MR First 246 words: You can’t kill someone at a bake sale; death and dessert don’t mix. But as the too-blonde curls and too-tight shirt leaned closer to my boyfriend – ex-boyfriend- than cupcake sales required, the prohibition crumbled. With every giggle, Josie Connor ...