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by Denisa
November 20th, 2014, 2:48 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Defender: Return of the Harkers
Replies: 2
Views: 2059

Re: Defender: Return of the Harkers

Trying something with a little more voice here on this go-round. I am seeking literary representation and hope you will consider for my fantasy novel, DEFENDER: RETURN OF THE HARKERS. Before school even starts, Caden is caught with a knife he's not allowed to have. Not because it's a weapon. The ac...
by Denisa
November 19th, 2014, 1:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
Replies: 4
Views: 2290

Re: Query: Shades of Darkness

Carla Dubrov has spent most of her life imprisoned or on the run. Why? What did she do? Start with that. she learns, through a vision, that Jason D’Cartey will give his life to save hers Who is Jason? Is she psychic? What does giving life to save hers mean? Under what circumstances? What danger is ...
by Denisa
November 19th, 2014, 1:58 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
Replies: 4
Views: 2290

Revised #3

Dear … There is no such thing as true immortality. Eternity is a long time to make enemies, and Carla Dubrov knows that sooner or later, everyone gets killed. To survive, Carla has taken the lives of many immortals, but the one that will forever haunt her was not taken—it was given. Anthony, the man...
by Denisa
October 29th, 2014, 12:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
Replies: 4
Views: 2290

Re: Query: Shades of Darkness

This is a second draft I've been working on. Which one sounds better? Dear … Carla Dubrov has spent most of her life imprisoned or on the run. But when she learns, through a vision, that Jason D’Cartey will give his life to save hers, she must venture out of hiding. She has never met Jason, but she ...
by Denisa
October 27th, 2014, 2:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4
Replies: 4
Views: 2290

Query: Shades of Darkness Revised at post #4

Hey guys! This is my query. Any suggestions you might have to improve it will be well received. Thank you in advance. Dear ..., Carla Dubrov knew that a young man named Jason D’Cartey would one day give his life to protect hers. She knew because she had seen it in a vision–and that, not death, was C...
by Denisa
October 26th, 2014, 6:04 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 281464

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: SHADES OF DARKNESS Genre: fantasy Words: 273 His eyes turned to me the second I entered the room; those sharp black eyes I only knew from my vision—the stranger’s eyes. No. He is not a stranger, I told myself with a shudder. He is Richard D’Cartey’s son. And his life depends on me. My mouth w...
by Denisa
October 26th, 2014, 5:25 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 119644

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford, There is no such thing as true immortality. Eternity is a long time to make enemies, and Carla Dubrov knows that sooner or later, everyone gets killed. To survive, Carla has taken the lives of many immortals, but the one that will forever haunt her was not taken—it was given. Ant...