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by Jillian Karger
February 24th, 2014, 4:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!
Replies: 5
Views: 4166

Re: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!

1976. Konrad Franks and his family are living a peaceful , happy existence in New York City —that is until he Konrad meets a young Jewish boy named Alex. (I think we need a little more about Alex here, and how meeting him brings out the Dybbuk. Does Alex put a curse on Konrad? How does he know about...
by Jillian Karger
February 24th, 2014, 12:01 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: MOORHOUSE (Upper MG Dark Fantasy)
Replies: 3
Views: 4826

Query: MOORHOUSE (Upper MG Dark Fantasy)

Hey everyone! Thank you so much in advance for any feedback you are able to give me on my query. It is much appreciated! Dear Agent: Vita Lawrence only has two friends, and one of them is imaginary. When her only real friend grows out of playing make-believe, Vita spends more and more time with her ...
by Jillian Karger
February 23rd, 2014, 11:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: How to write a query?
Replies: 1
Views: 1898

Re: How to write a query?

Janet Reid's query website is really useful in the process of writing a query. Janet is an agent who critiques queries submitted to the site and points out several do's and don't's: http://queryshark.blogspot.com This blog post also helped me a lot in figuring out the bones of my query: http://editt...
by Jillian Karger
February 23rd, 2014, 11:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BENEATH THE CYPRESS TREE Query help!
Replies: 2
Views: 2468

Re: BENEATH THE CYPRESS TREE Query help!

The second query is definitely much stronger. However I would suggest that you DO name the boyfriend and best friend, so you don't have to keep saying "her boyfriend" and "her best friend"--it feels clunky. There was a character soup in the previous draft but it's okay to name just two more characte...