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by Sweet Venom
April 30th, 2014, 6:33 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: - Princess - Y/A Historical Fiction Novel
Replies: 2
Views: 2494

- Princess - Y/A Historical Fiction Novel

Just wrote this query on a whim. In 1645 Trisinford, Logan and the Vox Atrum are hired assassins that are imprisoned and tortured by King Hartole for failing a mission. They manage to escape the ax and find safety in Aralia, a neighboring country ruled by King Comelious. Upon arrival, the men succes...
by Sweet Venom
February 22nd, 2014, 7:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: BENEATH THE CYPRESS TREE Query help!
Replies: 2
Views: 2466

Re: BENEATH THE CYPRESS TREE Query help!

Starting the query off with "17-year-old Emma Rocklin is attacked and left for dead in the woods behind her house in swampy Brentwood, Louisiana" is an instant hook that works because I know how old your protagonist is, where she lives, and what happened to her. It drew me in. Is the boyfriend a ful...
by Sweet Venom
February 20th, 2014, 1:10 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 5 pages of the Dybbuk!
Replies: 2
Views: 4429

Re: First 5 pages of the Dybbuk!

I like the ending where the tension begins to build. Is there any way you could get to that point quicker? I'll admit you lost me a bit with all of the dialogue. I wasn't really sure where the conversation was heading and I got a bit bored. I'm not invested in these characters yet to be interested i...
by Sweet Venom
February 20th, 2014, 12:42 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: How to write a query?
Replies: 1
Views: 1897

How to write a query?

Hi, I'm new here. When I say new I also mean new to social networking. I'm struggling with just navigating this website...I'm a complete newbie to all things technological! I see there is a thread here about posting queries, and threads regarding feedback for actual queries. Is there a thread on her...