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by Anigirl
September 27th, 2014, 11:18 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Just to get your opinion...
Replies: 1
Views: 1654

Just to get your opinion...

So, I spent some time writing a query for my very-hard-to-query book. I think the query is...pretty okay. At any rate, I was writing a little while ago and this blurb/query/summery/thing came right out. As I look I at, I've been considering using it as my query. So here it is! All I want is your opi...
by Anigirl
September 27th, 2014, 11:11 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: MOORHOUSE (Upper MG Dark Fantasy)
Replies: 3
Views: 4432

Re: Query: MOORHOUSE (Upper MG Dark Fantasy)

This is so good that I'm jealous. I LOVE that opening line, and the snippets of humor (caterpillar with emphasis on the cat made me chuckle.) The stakes are clear and you certainly left me wanting to read more.

I'm no lit agent, but I really can't see this NOT getting one. Very good :)
by Anigirl
February 5th, 2014, 10:13 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 5 pages of the Dybbuk!
Replies: 2
Views: 3655

First 5 pages of the Dybbuk!

First 5 pages of my first novel! Let me know what you think and if it sucks, rip me to shreds! New York City, 1976: He was young, only around thirteen. His eyes were dark brown and sparkled with delight as he sprinted across the field, beads of sweat rolling down his neck and forehead and moistening...
by Anigirl
February 5th, 2014, 10:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!
Replies: 5
Views: 3799

Re: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!

I made some slight adjustments after having gone to some other forums (not that I dont absolutely love this one) and here's the result. Please tell me how it looks!: ---- 1976. Konrad Franks and his family are living a peaceful, happy existence in New York City—that is until he meets a young Jewish ...
by Anigirl
December 22nd, 2013, 11:00 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!
Replies: 5
Views: 3799

Re: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!

Shawn, Thanks so much for the comment! :D Hm. Is this any better? 1976. Konrad Franks and his family are living a peaceful, happy existence in New York City—that is until he meets a young Jewish boy named Alex. Soon after, Konrad begins to notice odd things happening to him. A shadow on the wall. A ...
by Anigirl
November 29th, 2013, 7:42 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 111485

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear Mr. Bransford In the mid-1970s, thirty years after the end of World War II, Konrad Franks is living a peaceful, happy life with his wife and son in New York City--until he meets a Jewish boy named Alex. Soon after meeting the boy, Konrad begins to notice odd things happening to him. At first it...
by Anigirl
November 29th, 2013, 12:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!
Replies: 5
Views: 3799

The Dybbuk- Query help and critique!

(Hello! I really need some critique on my query letter! Much appreciated!) Dear (Agent's name),. In the mid-1970s, thirty years after the end of World War II, Konrad Franks is living a peaceful, happy life with his wife and son in New York City--until he meets a Jewish boy named Alex. Soon after mee...