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by Skyless16
November 24th, 2013, 1:01 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for dedicated CPs. General fiction, young adufantasy
Replies: 1
Views: 4465

Re: Looking for dedicated CPs. General fiction, young adufantasy

This is a really interesting idea! So it's basically for practice? We just write a short story or something and let each other read and critique it? I'd love to do that. I prefer to write YA fantasy as well, though anything fiction is fine.
by Skyless16
November 24th, 2013, 12:56 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel
Replies: 2
Views: 4820

Re: Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel

I would be interested. Yours sounds interesting. I have a YA novel, Bleamy's Corner, that was refected by an interested agent because the YA voice was not right. I need to take out my adult voice and make it that of a bright twelve year old. Inserting (almost used interested again...) the first cha...
by Skyless16
August 9th, 2013, 11:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: The Forest and the Sea
Replies: 8
Views: 7610

Re: Query: The Forest and the Sea

I completely agree and second what Beethovenfan said. Query Shark is very helpful. You should definitely read through the archives. Trust me, it's going to help a ton.
by Skyless16
August 9th, 2013, 11:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Heck, I called it a thriller. lets see.
Replies: 2
Views: 2621

Re: Heck, I called it a thriller. lets see.

We had thought we were lucky. The attack had broken on the pilings of the bridge. The two motor launches had not slowed as they turned into the channel and had shattered. Now, though, came the second wave and it was overland. The patriotic volunteers had been disillusioned and gone back to their da...
by Skyless16
August 9th, 2013, 11:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Looking for feedback on my query letter.
Replies: 3
Views: 3245

Re: Looking for feedback on my query letter.

Kristina, this letter is impossible to read. You should separate the huge blocks of text into shorter paragraphs. That was it's muuuch easier to read that way. Also, this really isn't a query letter. It's a brief synopsis. You should do a little more research on how to write and format a query lette...
by Skyless16
June 16th, 2013, 7:40 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY THE WOODLANDS YA Science Fiction
Replies: 4
Views: 4217

Re: QUERY THE WOODLANDS YA Science Fiction

This is a good improvement and I can work with this. It's alright. I read a few advice sites on queries which said, more showing less telling but I may have gone overboard. Is this what a more traditional query 'should' look like. You're right, it's better to show than to tell. You just went about ...
by Skyless16
June 14th, 2013, 7:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY THE WOODLANDS YA Science Fiction
Replies: 4
Views: 4217

Re: QUERY Escape is just the beginning YA Science Fiction

This isn't a query letter. Most agents are against the idea of making the query letter from the character's POV. It's seen as a gimmick. While this is third person, it seems more like a scene from the book. In fact, it seems like a few scenes from the book thrown onto a page and called a query lette...
by Skyless16
April 29th, 2013, 1:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER
Replies: 4
Views: 6849

Re: Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER

In 1665 London, Brimley Tinderbuss writes sharp criticisms of King Charles II's tax-heavy reign. His treasonous words earn him popularity and a possible date with the hangman, but no financial reward. Despite this, he remains optimistic and continues to write scathing reviews of the King's edicts. ...
by Skyless16
April 29th, 2013, 12:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:: The Truth About Rabbit Holes :: YA Fantasy
Replies: 6
Views: 9697

Re: Query: The Truth About Rabbit Holes YA Fantasy

Thanks sooooo much, everything you guys have said so far has been really helpful. I'm gonna apply these changes to my query now.
by Skyless16
April 28th, 2013, 1:14 pm
Forum: Ask Nathan
Topic: How should I adress a general query?
Replies: 1
Views: 2802

How should I adress a general query?

Hi, Sorry if you've already answered this question before, I looked everywhere but couldn't find an answer. Some agencies, in their submissions guidelines, give the option of a sending your query to a general query email address that will be sent to all of the agents. If I choose this option, how am...
by Skyless16
April 25th, 2013, 8:50 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel
Replies: 2
Views: 4820

Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel

I need a Critique Partner that will give me their honest opinion about my novel. I've had my friends and family read it but, as every writer probably knows, they're not the most reliable source for feedback. I just need to know if my novel needs to be revised in any way. Are there any holes in the p...
by Skyless16
April 25th, 2013, 12:53 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:: The Truth About Rabbit Holes :: YA Fantasy
Replies: 6
Views: 9697

Query:: The Truth About Rabbit Holes :: YA Fantasy

Dear Ms. Rennert, Rabbit holes aren’t the only way to Wonderland... The protagonist of THE TRUTH ABOUT RABBIT HOLES soon discovers this in a twisted retelling of Alice in Wonderland. Alice Waters is an orphaned, sixteen year old girl who leads a normal life. She expects her life to stay normal, unti...