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by Theresa_B
April 25th, 2013, 1:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:: The Truth About Rabbit Holes :: YA Fantasy
Replies: 7
Views: 6463

Re: Query: The Truth About Rabbit Holes YA Fantasy

Dear Ms. Rennert, Rabbit holes aren’t the only way to Wonderland... Alice Waters is an orphaned, sixteen year old girl who leads a normal life until her whole world is turned upside-down when she accepts a dare from a shady school clique. Upon entering a supposedly cursed room in an abandoned inn, ...
by Theresa_B
April 24th, 2013, 5:51 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11880

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

jacksonbaer wrote:I received a contract offer from Pandamoon Publishing today based on the final version of the query in this thread
Congratulations! That is so exciting!

I enjoyed seeing your query evolve throughout the edits, and am so glad to hear that you got an offer!
by Theresa_B
April 24th, 2013, 5:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5384

Re: Query, let me know

I would slim down the background info and bulk up what happens when they get together at the reunion. Also, as others said, using all four characters full names is a bit much. Maybe just use their first names. I think it's a very solid start, just needs a bit of tweeking. I like a lot of the re-writ...
by Theresa_B
April 24th, 2013, 5:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Upper MG Fantasy
Replies: 4
Views: 3909

Re: Upper MG Fantasy

I read all the versions of your query and this one is amazing! It gives me a great idea of the story and the conflict. Love it. Great improvement!
by Theresa_B
April 24th, 2013, 5:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Please Request Query Feedback: Literary/Avant-Garde
Replies: 4
Views: 3679

Re: Please Request Query Feedback: Literary/Avant-Garde

Hi Jane, I, too, found the query very confusing. You have too many details and characters and it was hard to find the plot. Try focusing on the main conflict of the book. Try answering the question in one sentence: What is my book about? And build on that. I find Query Shark to be very helpful, espe...
by Theresa_B
April 24th, 2013, 5:04 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults
Replies: 5
Views: 11745

Re: Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults

I found the query very confusing. Like Calsea, I thought Mary was the angel. I didn't realize the first line had the characters listed in reverse order. I also have no clue as to what the plot actually is. I'd consider rethinking how you introduce the characters, also, add in more info about the plo...