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by jacksonbaer
November 11th, 2013, 12:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Hey everyone,

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by jacksonbaer
September 24th, 2013, 2:08 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

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by jacksonbaer
April 25th, 2013, 2:36 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Thank you. My first query was absolutely terrible. The final version still wasn't perfect but it did garner interest from two lit agents and one publishing company so it must have been decent.
by jacksonbaer
April 10th, 2013, 1:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

I received a contract offer from Pandamoon Publishing today based on the final version of the query in this thread (plus a few small changes). Thanks for all your help everyone!

Jackson
by jacksonbaer
March 30th, 2013, 2:31 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Thank you again for your help and I most definitely will. I'm also working with another editor/manuscript professional to perfect the query. I will let you guys know what she says too.
by jacksonbaer
March 29th, 2013, 11:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

I would have to respectfully disagree with your critique of the opening. On Twitter today, I received two query requests from agents based on that one sentence during #pitmad. I do appreciate your constructive criticism as it is helping me make the query one that will garner interest in the book. As...
by jacksonbaer
March 29th, 2013, 1:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Thank you, that was extremely helpful. Let's try this again: Dear Mr. x, When Scott and Jessie's daughter is kidnapped, they fear the worst as all that's left behind is a pool of her blood. Seventeen-year old Ashley Miller vanishes and her strange disappearance is quickly thought to be a homicide. H...
by jacksonbaer
March 29th, 2013, 1:40 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5328

Re: Query, let me know

Here's the direction I would head, though keep in mind I'm a better writer than query writing :) Dear Mrs. x, When William and Bradley are killed in a drunk driving accident, their small town in Vermont is left reeling. The boys four closest childhood friends are hit especially hard, happening days ...
by jacksonbaer
March 29th, 2013, 1:07 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Closer??? :) Dear Mr. x, When Scott and Jessie's daughter is kidnapped, they fear the worst as all that's left behind is a pool of her blood. Ashley is seventeen-years old and her disappearance is quickly thought to be a homicide. Their cozy, northwest town is stunned by the news when police find th...
by jacksonbaer
March 29th, 2013, 12:28 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Thank you for the feedback. I've been working on it for more than two weeks now with a lit agency intern and another author. It is harder to write than the book itself! I appreciate the feedback and will post a revision with your advice and the author's mixed in.
by jacksonbaer
March 28th, 2013, 7:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

How's this: Dear Mr. x, When Scott and Jessie's daughter is kidnapped, divers scouting the local river discover the body of another girl. Ashley, their only daughter, is seventeen-years old and her worthless boyfriend called 911 to report that a masked intruder broke into his home, shot Ashley, and ...
by jacksonbaer
March 28th, 2013, 1:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
Replies: 18
Views: 11806

Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help

Thank you for the direct and honest feedback. I will rewrite it and would love your thoughts afterwards.
by jacksonbaer
March 27th, 2013, 7:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5328

Re: Query, let me know

I will look at it later tonight and give you more specific advice, though it's just my opinion :) If you get a chance, check out the query I posted too.
by jacksonbaer
March 27th, 2013, 7:27 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5328

Re: Query, let me know

I actually like that... Work that into the query because right now I'm not sure what happens after they reunite.
by jacksonbaer
March 27th, 2013, 6:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5328

Re: Query, let me know

I think the story has a lot of potential and sounds very interesting. What is the main conflict? Is it the accident at the beginning or what happens after they go to Dan's house after the reunion? If they are just telling stories, I think it lacks what I would want to keep my attention.