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by Hayden 10
March 27th, 2013, 7:36 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5329

Re: Query, let me know

I actually like that... Work that into the query because right now I'm not sure what happens after they reunite. Dude, I love your feedback!! But in the the first draft of my query, I worked that in but it was over 1000 words. trying to find a happy medium, and I think you might be the key. What do...
by Hayden 10
March 27th, 2013, 7:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5329

Re: Query, let me know

I think the story has a lot of potential and sounds very interesting. What is the main conflict? Is it the accident at the beginning or what happens after they go to Dan's house after the reunion? If they are just telling stories, I think it lacks what I would want to keep my attention. Shoot. The ...
by Hayden 10
March 27th, 2013, 6:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5329

Re: Query, let me know

jacksonbaer wrote:Hi,
Besides the obvious mistakes, what do you think about the basic premise of the story?

I think I would cut down on listing all the names of the characters, especially each time you mention them. For a short query, it comes off as a bit redundant...
by Hayden 10
March 27th, 2013, 6:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5329

Re: Query, let me know

[quote="jacksonbaer" Yeah, you're right bro. I need to work that out. Trying to cut things down, but in the end just repeating names again and again. Will fix it. Thanks for your input dude! I think I would cut down on listing all the names of the characters, especially each time you mention them. F...
by Hayden 10
March 27th, 2013, 4:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query, let me know
Replies: 12
Views: 5329

Query, let me know

Dear (agent), of (agent’s agency) I am currently seeking representation for my completed manuscript entitled “The Survivors of The Saint Augustine’s Six. Because of your enthusiasm for(blank commercial and literary fiction) well as your interest in(blank memoirs..) believe you may want to see my wor...