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by writerly_black_cat
March 1st, 2013, 12:51 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Why you'll never be any good....
Replies: 11
Views: 3008

Re: Why you'll never be any good....

I agree with abc, I need a discipline injection sooo badly. I've been writing everyday but my biggest issue is that I need to write longhand. Whenever I go to type something, and write directly into ms word, I just delete and revise every sentence at least twice and I get nowhere. At least writing l...
by writerly_black_cat
February 13th, 2013, 4:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: query for a thriller
Replies: 2
Views: 2038

Re: query for a thriller

Hello! My notes are in blue. Cuts are red. QUERY FOR ST. JOHNS Justin Thomas had recently started an environmental company. With two new contracts up near Putnam County he packed up his boat and newest employee to start on them. One job was for an algae problem on the St. Johns River and the other w...
by writerly_black_cat
February 6th, 2013, 3:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG - Liza Marie Rumpleton: Real Fake Fortune Teller
Replies: 5
Views: 3050

Re: MG - Liza Marie Rumpleton: Real Fake Fortune Teller

Dear [Agent], Nine-year-old Liza Marie Rumpleton tells fortunes—usually fake, sometimes real—at a pair of overturned peach crates in her parents’ garage. The fake fortunes bring in the cash, but when a real one saves a reporter from an accident at the town marble-polishing factory, business starts b...
by writerly_black_cat
February 6th, 2013, 3:17 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Cursed: YA Fantasy Query
Replies: 4
Views: 4466

Cursed: YA Fantasy Query

Hello all! I began writing a query for my novel "Cursed" and I need help revising it. It's still in it's first draft so I'm only focusing on the meat of the query, rather than the bit about me at the end. Let me know what sounds wonky, what doesn't make sense, what you would cut, what you think I sh...
by writerly_black_cat
February 5th, 2013, 2:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - MG Fantasy
Replies: 5
Views: 1747

Re: Query - MG Fantasy

So hopefully these comments are helpful, I just wrote down whatever questions popped into my head. There's definitely a lot of good stuff going on here and I like the tone of the query, I'm just trying to wrap my head around the story presented. Twelve-year-old Eric's brain and body had been taken ...
by writerly_black_cat
February 5th, 2013, 1:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Fantasy Query
Replies: 1
Views: 875

Re: YA Fantasy Query

Hello! I thought I'd offer some comments on this (in blue). I'm a copywriter and proofreader by trade and I hope this is helpful! Dani Strider knows how to be invisible, survive alone in the wilderness, listen to someone’s thoughts, and kill a man in 42 different ways. What she doesn’t know is why....
by writerly_black_cat
February 5th, 2013, 1:09 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Contempary Query
Replies: 2
Views: 1025

Re: YA Contempary Query

Hello there! I thought I'd give this a read through and offer some comments. I'm a copywriter and proofreader by trade, so this practice helps both of us. Pink text has my changes and comments are in blue. Seventeen-year-old Natalie Miller is as good as dead. At least she thinks so. Her parents igno...