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by CFraser
February 8th, 2013, 10:06 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults
Replies: 5
Views: 11725

Re: Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults

Thanks for the feedback; will draft up another in the near future. Shah, I think you may have posted in the wrong thread :)
by CFraser
January 16th, 2013, 12:15 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: What are you reading now?
Replies: 520
Views: 142060

Re: What are you reading now?

Recently finished Red Country by Joe Abercrombie. Brilliant book that combines the Wild West with medieval fantasy.
by CFraser
January 16th, 2013, 11:28 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults
Replies: 5
Views: 11725

Query - Supernatural Thriller for Adults

Hi, I'm looking for some feedback on my blurb (or what I like to call a "written teaser trailer") for a yet untitled (three years and still no title definitive title...) adult supernatural thriller. "An Angel with no memory. An ex soldier who can't let go. A patient at a mental health facility. When...
by CFraser
January 16th, 2013, 11:22 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for UF/Paranormal fan to trade 1st 50 pgs
Replies: 3
Views: 3669

Re: Looking for UF/Paranormal fan to trade 1st 50 pgs

I'm happy to read through the first ten thousand or so words if you're still looking for feedback. I'm still editing my first story, which is a supernatural thriller that is aimed for adults (profanity, drug use, violence, dark and unpleasant imagery) and would like to exchange the first few thousan...
by CFraser
January 16th, 2013, 9:11 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
Replies: 3
Views: 3683

Re: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground

I agree with the changes Kristie has suggested. The main point I love about this excerpt is the fact that you made me instantly feel as if Finch is instantly the bad guy, but then do a 180 and make Ross seem like she has an air of 'asshattedness' where she's playing everything too much to the book. ...
by CFraser
January 14th, 2013, 7:22 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Excerpt from Chap. 1 of Supernatural thriller - 580 words
Replies: 0
Views: 2736

Excerpt from Chap. 1 of Supernatural thriller - 580 words

This is an excerpt from the opening of a second part in a trilogy. Currently finishing off the first story with edits (snore). It's aimed for adults and contains language that some might find offensive. Enjoy, and all pointers will be appreciated. Thanks. Chapter One Sheppard was bleeding. He couldn...
by CFraser
January 14th, 2013, 6:54 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Page 1 of "I am Alone"
Replies: 9
Views: 5359

Re: Page 1 of "I am Alone"

My 2 cents: 1) I liked the quick sentencing; too the point, neat and short. 2) Rags? As in head and shoulders/ghillie suit? I thought he was in a building; ghillies aren't that good in urban areas and it'd be hard to get rid of them quickly. Ghillie suits are also heavy and hot as buggery; something...
by CFraser
January 14th, 2013, 5:59 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What's your editing style?
Replies: 15
Views: 8290

Re: What's your editing style?

I've never even thought about printing it off and then penning my thoughts down in red...

It'll make it easier. I usually get my laptop out, make a pot of tea and put a film on for some distraction every ten minutes or so.