Nathan Bransford - The Forums

One more reply! Try to summarize your story in one sentence. That will be a useful exercise for you. If I had to do it: "12 year old Tory Fletcher must travel across the universe and use her mythical powers to fight an evil force known as the Guards to break an ancient curse of bad luck." ...

I hate to say this, but I'm still having difficulty with your synopsis. I just don't see how everything connects. I can imagine how they connect, and fill in the gaps on my own, but as far as the information you've given me it doesn't entirely make sense. For example, if there is an old curse on her...

You have spelling mistakes and your grammar is off. Fix that and then work on explaining your story better. Give the general idea of your story, but add in the specifics. What you've written about is just a concept. It doesn't give enough detail, despite its length. And remember to make it cohesive ...