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by McRouth
October 13th, 2012, 9:31 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Dystopian Pitch
Replies: 4
Views: 1494

Re: YA Dystopian Pitch

What about this? Sixteen-year-old Maggie Spencer decides to conduct her own investigation when the police furtively label her missing lab partner, Oliver McCray, a runaway. She was, after all, the last person to see him before he disappeared, and she has at least one clue the police don’t: Oliver’s ...
by McRouth
October 12th, 2012, 11:25 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Children's Picture Book Query
Replies: 1
Views: 994

Re: Children's Picture Book Query

Hi Kristie, I've never written a children's book, but here it goes... Five-year-old Bridget loves dolls, animals, tea parties and building sandcastles, but definitely not bugs. While building a sandcastle outside, she’s bugged by a butterfly and becomes scared. As the 2nd sentence in the query, this...
by McRouth
October 12th, 2012, 10:47 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
Replies: 3
Views: 3724

Re: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground

@klbritt: Thanks for the feedback! I love the idea about an overheard conversation. I've been going in circles about what to do with that scene, and I'm going to try your suggestion. Yes, proudly, the novel is done! I'm in editing/feedback mode right now, so I'd love you to take a look at it if you ...
by McRouth
October 11th, 2012, 12:56 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: **Updated**Excerpt - YA Dystopian -- Untouchable
Replies: 4
Views: 3409

Re: **Updated**Excerpt - YA Dystopian -- Untouchable

UNTOUCHABLE (working title) I'm all about slicing things down, so here is my re-worked version. Hope this helps! By the way, awesome job! I admire your eye from language and description. If you ever need someone to swap novels with, let me know. I am in the process of editing a YA dystopian, too. A...
by McRouth
October 11th, 2012, 12:29 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground
Replies: 3
Views: 3724

Prologue: YA Dystopian - The Underground

I wrote this prologue to introduce world and develop the conflict for the MC, Oliver. I worry it's not as eye-catching as a first page needs to be. Any feedback is welcome! Also, the rest of the novel is in first person; is it cheating to have a 3rd person prologue? The Underground: Prologue Princi...
by McRouth
October 10th, 2012, 11:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Dystopian Pitch
Replies: 4
Views: 1494

YA Dystopian Pitch

Having trouble with the pitch section of my query. My novel is from multiple POVs and I want the pitch to be concise, but it's proving difficult. Any help would be much appreciated! Here's what I got so far: Option 1: Everyone used to go to school for free. Seriously. Thanks to the FACTS exams, onl...