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by curtisedmonds
August 9th, 2012, 10:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Re: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

Thanks for the feedback. I haven't yet sent the query to Query Shark - still writing and rewriting, but I intend to.
by curtisedmonds
August 8th, 2012, 10:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Re: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

The 250-word thing is more of a guideline - if an agent really likes a query, she's not going to do a word count.
by curtisedmonds
August 8th, 2012, 9:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Historical Fiction Novel--Trooper
Replies: 8
Views: 1909

Re: YA Historical Fiction Novel--Trooper

What I question after reading this is whether the character of Johnny is interesting or if he is just caught up in the war. He seems very generic, based on the query. If you get the chance, read "Unbroken," by Laura Hillenbrand - the main character is in the same kind of situation, but he's a very r...
by curtisedmonds
August 7th, 2012, 10:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Re: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

I tightened this up a bit. I am grateful for the feedback I've gotten, and hope that this resonates a little better. I am a very linear thinker, and it's natural for me to focus on this happens-and then this happens-and then this happens, but you can't really do that in 250 words. Dear Query Shark: ...
by curtisedmonds
August 4th, 2012, 11:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Re: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

OK, tried it that way: Dear Mr. Agent: Will Morse loves alone in a cabin atop the North Georgia mountains. He develops a romantic friendship with Dorothy Crawford, a writer who knocks on his door, seeking directions. Although Will is all but consumed with grief over the death of his daughter Trixie,...
by curtisedmonds
August 3rd, 2012, 11:06 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Re: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

Thanks for your comments. There are two reasons that I don't particularly want to start the query talking about the death of the daughter and the resulting scandal. I understand that may be a more compelling and interesting way to start the query, but I'm not sure it's the right approach. First, I d...
by curtisedmonds
August 2nd, 2012, 10:25 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)
Replies: 11
Views: 2743

Query: Rain on Your Wedding Day (Commercial Fiction)

I am new to this forum, but I am a long-time reader of the blog and I hope I have incorporated at least some of what I have learned in this query. I appreciate any thoughts or suggestions. DearMr. Agent: Will Morse lives alone in the remote North Georgia wilderness, lost in grief, sorrow, and regret...