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- April 3rd, 2013, 9:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Cursed: YA Fantasy Query
- Replies: 4
- Views: 6224
Re: Cursed: YA Fantasy Query
As I was reading, I compiled a few thoughts: "a spell that removed the memory of him from existence, all because of a tiny threat." is awkwardly phrased and a little confusing. Is it relevant that Prince Renald of Wintergreen is his "greatest enemy and cousin"? I'm guessing so, b...
- March 30th, 2013, 11:47 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Looking for Honest Feedback
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6788
Re: Looking for Honest Feedback
Thanks for the nice message on my query. Good luck revising yours. I'm glad you found my suggestions to be helpful. I know that I had sooooo many different versions of my query that just did not convey the tone of the book and were, therefore, quite boring (or at least not interesting enough). I kno...
- March 29th, 2013, 9:42 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
- Replies: 18
- Views: 16964
Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
I like this much better! You still convey the intricacy of the story, and now I'm not distracted by what I think the narrator ought to be feeling. I've given several of my opinions on the revised query below. Keep in mind that everybody's opinion is subjective, so if you don't like what I have to sa...
- March 29th, 2013, 9:30 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Upper MG Fantasy
- Replies: 4
- Views: 5671
Upper MG Fantasy
Some of you may have seen previous attempts at a query for this book here. I set the book aside for a while and then went through and eliminated many, many scenes to give it a new (more original) focus. So this is a slightly edgier query letter that I've been working on for the past few days. Dear ....
- March 29th, 2013, 9:15 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: new query for a thriller
- Replies: 3
- Views: 5291
Re: new query for a thriller
I can tell you've got a lot of action in your story, which is, of course, perfect for your genre. However, as I was reading through I got a little confused as to why certain things were happening. I commented on a few specifics. The thing about a query letter is that it has to stand completely on it...
- March 28th, 2013, 1:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Looking for Honest Feedback
- Replies: 6
- Views: 6788
Re: Looking for Honest Feedback
It does sound like you've had a very interesting life, Kristina. I think you could quite a few stories. However, I did have a few problems with your query letter. I think the first paragraph is good. You show you know who the agent is and explain why you're querying him. But the second paragraph is ...
- March 28th, 2013, 12:51 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
- Replies: 18
- Views: 16964
Re: The Earth Bleeds Red- Query Help
This is not my genre, so I can't comment upon the story. It does like it could be pretty darn scary and fascinating, though. However, I have read that a lot of agents don't like to have the query letter written in the voice of the main character. Of course, there will be some who like things that ot...
- March 28th, 2013, 12:40 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Do most authors use Pen Names?
- Replies: 3
- Views: 4475
Re: Do most authors use Pen Names?
I have to imagine it's not vital to decide on something like this until after you are putting out a book. And, unless you're self-publishing, you can get input from professionals - namely whoever is putting out your book and (if you go that route) your agent. I mean, it's good to built a web presenc...
- January 13th, 2013, 12:41 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: "Bad Writing" - a documentary
- Replies: 0
- Views: 1849
"Bad Writing" - a documentary
http://vimeo.com/56625296
Vernon Lott (an English student in his late 30s) wrote a lot of poetry in his 20s that he now recognizes was awful, so he made a documentary about how to recognize bad writing and how to become a good writer. He does a lot of interesting interviews.
Vernon Lott (an English student in his late 30s) wrote a lot of poetry in his 20s that he now recognizes was awful, so he made a documentary about how to recognize bad writing and how to become a good writer. He does a lot of interesting interviews.
- January 9th, 2013, 10:43 am
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Reading as Catharsis
- Replies: 3
- Views: 3779
Re: Reading as Catharsis
I'm sure this isn't nearly as scientific as you want, but sometimes when I'm angry about something, I'll read a book that will make me happy, and when I'm finished reading, I find that I am a happier person and maybe more willing to not be angry with the person I was fighting with. And not being ang...
- January 9th, 2013, 10:35 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Strangely Quiet
- Replies: 8
- Views: 5608
Re: Strangely Quiet
I don't think my world has been nearly as hectic and Brenda's, but Christmas time always means family time, and present shopping time, and some writing time, and colds. Right now I have a cold that is really clogging up my brain, which is annoying b/c I took off work and therefore have time to write...
- January 9th, 2013, 10:26 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - MG Fantasy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3871
Re: Query - MG Fantasy
You guys are right. Here is my revised query: Twelve-year-old Eric's brain and body had been taken over by an evil cacodemon, so his sister hunted down the only people who could help him - the supposedly mythical winged Sentinels. But in exchange for their help, Eric has to live in their town, give ...
- December 29th, 2012, 8:17 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Desperate for inspiration.
- Replies: 5
- Views: 4999
Re: Desperate for inspiration.
I completely agree. Everyone needs a vacation from writing sometimes. And if your book is with editors, I'd guess you might be getting it soon for revisions, so soon you'll have more than enough on your plate. Do some reading, watch some TV, go for a walk. All of these things refresh my brain and ca...
- December 29th, 2012, 8:05 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: V.O.I.C.E. query- YA Romance
- Replies: 6
- Views: 4502
Re: V.O.I.C.E. query REVISED 2
Here is my second try at this query! The line in bold is my favorite line...but I feel like it doesn't belong where it is placed right now! Dear (agent) Living with your crush is supposed to be every girls dream come true, but if you’re about to become his step sister it kind of ruins that dream. Y...
- December 29th, 2012, 7:41 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: YA Query—FB
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3983
Re: YA Query—FB
Yes, I'm around thirty. Sorry I obviously confused you. I wasn't clear enough. I meant "teen speak" a.k.a. using words that teens use, for example, "lol" & "that's so perf". Hold on a sec, I'll check my cousin's FB & for a good example. And here it one of the fi...