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by chounzet
July 25th, 2012, 8:36 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised Query for THE FINAL CLUE
Replies: 16
Views: 5175

Re: Revised Query for THE FINAL CLUE

I was just reading the archives from the Query Shark and I saw you made it on there. That's great! Congrats! I can also see the polishing you have done here and I really am liking it :)
by chounzet
July 24th, 2012, 6:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: MG Query: Under Sentinel Guard
Replies: 11
Views: 3412

Re: MG Query: Under Sentinel Guard

Ordinary thirteen-year-old Eric Ortega wakes up surrounded by hospital equipment and covered with a flowered quilt. Before he can figure out what’s going on, a centaur clip-clops in and introduces himself as Eric’s healer. Next, his sister is telling him that he’s been sick, and she married a guy wi...
by chounzet
July 23rd, 2012, 2:01 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Quest for a Queen
Replies: 8
Views: 1593

Re: Quest for a Queen

Thank you for your input everyone :) I appreciate. Here is another shot. Not all of Maylee Tayten’s problems started when she snuck out that night, but the fact that she just witnessed a murder trumps her other issues. Even worse, she knows why they killed him. The time is now, the place is Jerusale...
by chounzet
July 22nd, 2012, 12:15 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Quest for a Queen
Replies: 8
Views: 1593

Re: Quest for a Queen

Thank you so much, Mark. I appreciate your feedback!!! :D
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 10:11 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Quest for a Queen
Replies: 8
Views: 1593

Re: Quest for a Queen

I'm offering an alternative, this is something I have been working on for a while. Which one works better? Not all of Maylee Tayten’s problems started when she snuck out that night, but the fact that she just witnessed a murder trumps her other issues. Even worse, she knows why they killed him. With...
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 6:55 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Quest for a Queen
Replies: 8
Views: 1593

Quest for a Queen

The sing-song Muslim call to prayer wakes the reader in present-day Jerusalem. In the night, a wealthy Arab merchant has died, leaving behind a deadly secret, pieces of which lay with a disappeared artifacts dealer, a half-cocked homeless man, and an aged Rabbi. The Quest for a Queen leads American ...
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 6:50 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query from an Aussie, YA, Title: The Woodlands
Replies: 8
Views: 1624

Re: Query from an Aussie, YA, Title: The Woodlands

I like this one the very best. Rosa is a 16-year-old smart mouth with a dangerous attitude. She makes impulsive and often poor choices. Not a good way to be when you live in the harshly controlled, concrete compounds of the Woodlands. It is her weakness and her greatest strength. It’s why Joseph fel...
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 6:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised Query for THE FINAL CLUE
Replies: 16
Views: 5175

Re: Revised Query for THE FINAL CLUE

Dear Agent, Seven years ago, officer Gina Russo fired a shot in self-defense. It triggered the explosion believed to have incinerated career criminal William Nicholas Mancuso. and everyone thought career criminal WNM was dead. Until now. Now an FBI Agent, Gina starts to receive death threats and poe...
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 6:28 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query snarl: SHADOWPLAY (REVISED) - New Version @ Post 8
Replies: 8
Views: 3112

Re: Query snarl: SHADOWPLAY

I really like the first line :) I also would like to know more about your characters-- they seem so alive to me with so many emotions, the fact that they are dead makes them even better. I get confused on what is actually happening. How are these people connected? She wakes up dead, so clearly her s...
by chounzet
July 20th, 2012, 6:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Remnant: revised query
Replies: 7
Views: 1681

Re: The Remnant: revised query

I definitely want to read this! I agree with Mark, it is a little too long. His idea for a starting line is a great jumping off point.