Nathan Bransford - The Forums

A boy with a hidden power must race against the clock to end a spell cast over his dad’s kingdom by Vesuvius, an evil sorcerer with a vendetta. Otherwise, he will be transformed into an animal and trapped inside of the kingdom forever. I think I would lose "Vesuvius" and just say "evi...

The land of the Dead, Exit, has never been more frightening. Souls are turning to stone. The world has fallen into perpetual night. And a legendary evil – the Man With No Eyes – is threatening to take over it all. The start of the first sentence reads awkward to me. What if you said, "Exit, the...