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by bananas
June 24th, 2012, 12:29 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised: ACEA AND THE ANIMAL KINGDOM
Replies: 10
Views: 2063

Re: Revised: ACEA AND THE ANIMAL KINGDOM

A boy with a hidden power must race against the clock to end a spell cast over his dad’s kingdom by Vesuvius, an evil sorcerer with a vendetta. Otherwise, he will be transformed into an animal and trapped inside of the kingdom forever. I think I would lose "Vesuvius" and just say "evil sorcerer with...
by bananas
June 24th, 2012, 12:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Night Falls: YA Fantasy
Replies: 12
Views: 3150

Re: Night Falls: YA Fantasy

The land of the Dead, Exit, has never been more frightening. Souls are turning to stone. The world has fallen into perpetual night. And a legendary evil – the Man With No Eyes – is threatening to take over it all. The start of the first sentence reads awkward to me. What if you said, "Exit, the land...