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- August 16th, 2012, 11:39 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
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A better query for Tardy Son
Thanks for the suggestions so far. I think I'm starting to get the hang of this a little bit. Here's another try: Query letter synopsis: 14-year-old Pid stows away in a boxcar in hopes he'll find his real mother in the San Francisco of 1958. Pid must overcome polio, life in an orphanage, and his own...
- August 15th, 2012, 11:48 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
I'm back with another rewrite of Tardy Son's query.
Hi folks, I've rewritten my query again after a bit of a break. It's below. Also, I recently became a semi-finalist for a literary award. In a query letter is it appropriate to put that information into the introductory paragraph of a query letter, or is it better to put at the end of the novel summ...
- July 9th, 2012, 3:57 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
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Here's another REWRITE of the query for Tardy Son
Dear Agent, I'm looking for representation with you because ______. He calls himself Pid, short for the name, Stupid. It's the name Sicario, his adoptive father uses for him. His real mother was Mexican, but Sicario, a white man, says Pid is now an Indian. It's 1950s California and Pid doesn't know ...
- July 1st, 2012, 12:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Re: Here's my query for Tardy Son
Thanks Karen, again. I'll get back to this soon.
—David
—David
- June 27th, 2012, 4:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Query try for Tardy Son, numero cinco
Hello again, novelists. Here's another try at my query. I don't expect it to be perfect, but is this better? Thanks for your help. Dear Agent, I'm looking for representation with you because ______. Pid, an abused 14-year-old boy, runs away from home by stowing away in a boxcar bound for San Francis...
- June 26th, 2012, 11:23 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Re: Here's my query for Tardy Son
Hi Karen, Thanks for the new feedback. I have a general question: you have a lot of questions concerning the sense of events but I'm not sure they can be answered in a query letter—this book is a first-person account from a 14-year-old boy and it become clear the narrator is not entirely reliable, s...
- June 25th, 2012, 4:38 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Here's my REWRITE of the query for Tardy Son
After taking the advice here and some from Nathan's blog, I hope this is now a better query. Please let me know what you think. Thanks in advance. Dear Agent, I'm looking for representation with you because ______. After Pid, an abused 14-year-old boy, stows away in a boxcar bound for San Francisco,...
- June 21st, 2012, 3:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Re: Here's my query for Tardy Son
Don't mind at all. Thank you so much, Karen.
Looks like I have a fair bit of work to do on this thing . . . which is what I thought in the beginning.
I'll get back here with a re-write after I've chased it around the room with an axe a few times.
Cheers
Looks like I have a fair bit of work to do on this thing . . . which is what I thought in the beginning.
I'll get back here with a re-write after I've chased it around the room with an axe a few times.
Cheers
- June 20th, 2012, 6:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Re: Here's my query for Tardy Son
Thanks lvcabbie,
Those are good questions. Thanks for the feedback. I'll work on it again and re-post it.
That was my first try. It's not easy learning to see through the eyes of a reader about my own book.
I'll be around. This seems like a fine forum.
Those are good questions. Thanks for the feedback. I'll work on it again and re-post it.
That was my first try. It's not easy learning to see through the eyes of a reader about my own book.
I'll be around. This seems like a fine forum.
- June 20th, 2012, 2:52 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Here's my query for Tardy Son
- Replies: 16
- Views: 8714
Here's my query for Tardy Son
Here's my query for Tardy Son. Dear Agent, TARDY SON deals with the prejudice, abuse, and racism of a California family in 1958. A boy with seven names learns a new identity by running away from home and by teaching himself to write. When a 14-year-old California boy's attempt to run away from home ...
- June 20th, 2012, 2:50 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
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Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Mr. Bransford, Here's my query for consideration. Dear Agent, I'm looking for representation with you because ______. Pid, an abused 14-year-old boy, runs away from home by stowing away in a boxcar bound for San Francisco in 1958. He calls himself Pid instead of Stupid, the name his adoptive fa...