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- June 22nd, 2012, 12:52 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: DREAMER: YA
- Replies: 4
- Views: 3446
Re: DREAMER: YA
I completely agree with QueenViv (especially on the part that Query letters are torture) but I feel she has very good points on your QL. Besides cleaning it up, I would also add a great opening hook line. Something like: “Rory’s has a gift, which is also her burden. Her dreams come true.” Something ...
- June 22nd, 2012, 12:35 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: Serendipity - New version on post 09
- Replies: 9
- Views: 5152
Re: QUERY: Serendipity
It’s just my opinion and I struggle with these as well, but I would start out with the story. Immediately start with the action to hook them then go into how you read their blog. It’s like when I flip over a book to read the backcover and if it doesn’t grab me right away or goes into stuff about the...
- June 20th, 2012, 1:31 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - The Vanguard: Uprising
- Replies: 12
- Views: 4766
Re: QUERY - The Vanguard: Uprising
Now, look how your query turns out: Dear [Agent name], I chose to submit to you because of your wonderful taste in [genre], and because you [personalized tidbit about agent]. [protagonist name] is a [description of protagonist] living in [setting]. But when [complicating incident], [protagonist nam...
- June 19th, 2012, 11:50 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY - The Vanguard: Uprising
- Replies: 12
- Views: 4766
Re: QUERY - The Vanguard: Uprising
I agree with the advice so far that there was to much backstory, but I liked the first line of your 1st QL. You need something that brings the reader in immediately. Jump right into the action/conflict. You want the reader to WANT more…a tease…enough that they want to know more about this world and ...
- June 19th, 2012, 10:17 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Eitan: Legacy of Light- YA fantasy
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3804
Re: Eitan: Legacy of Light- YA fantasy
Good luck! The revisions you’ve done on your QL are good. It would make me want to ask to see more.