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by arvales12
February 6th, 2014, 12:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Unibeltrasia The Fallen Prince
Replies: 1
Views: 2189

Query: Unibeltrasia The Fallen Prince

Sorry for not posting for sooooooooooooooooooooo long, just finished my book first Need help in Query and synopsis. Query first. Prince Tamiron Lluch, prince of the Trasidar Empire of the Far East, in an unexpected and bold move. Betrays the empire without any explanation.Totaling its army in one at...
by arvales12
July 10th, 2012, 12:38 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)
Replies: 3
Views: 3876

Re: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)

I marked things in red that could be taken out, and put things [in brackets] to maybe add. I'd also suggest making everything present tense so it sounds like you're narrating events as they are happening, rather then recounting them after the fact. Sounds like you've come up with a pretty intricate...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 1:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince
Replies: 7
Views: 2341

Re: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince

Thanks again mark! And I thank you for your patience. It's already night here and I need to sleep but I saw your post and figured I should give it my last try before hitting the bunk. :lol: Prince Tamiron Lluch betrays the Empire of the Far East, and takes command of the attacking force of their lon...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 10:50 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince
Replies: 7
Views: 2341

Re: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince

Mark I read what you said and I wondered what are those things that I should remove and you also said that I gave a little too much and I don't know how much you mean't. About the poeple I mentioned, yes they are all important. Plus, I added the other "Faction Antagonist" for I don't know what you c...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 10:26 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Adventure/Fantasy Agent.
Replies: 5
Views: 2390

Re: Adventure/Fantasy Agent.

Thanks again Mark! You are my savior! I'm just gathering everything up so that when the novel is ready, I'll be up to speed. I will tell you that, I am not sending any query letters yet because I know there is still much work to be done for my novel...

But thank you for the link!!! :mrgreen:
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 8:26 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince
Replies: 7
Views: 2341

Re: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince

The last line is where you should bring the title into play, in this case. For high fantasy, you are not hitting too high a word count, but your query is very very choppy and disjointed. What rampage? He rebelled. What is he doing? Is he the bad guy? Give the reader (in this case, an agent who is p...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 7:59 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Adventure/Fantasy Agent.
Replies: 5
Views: 2390

Re: Adventure/Fantasy Agent.

Thanks for the reply. Just checked out the site you gave and I think I have a shot there... :mrgreen:
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 3:23 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Adventure/Fantasy Agent.
Replies: 5
Views: 2390

Adventure/Fantasy Agent.

Yeah the title says it all. Can I have their names or blogs so that I can begin looking for who I like? My novel is a Fantasy Novel with a word count of 105k.

Sorry for asking it here because I already tried looking in the internet but I'm not so sure if they are genuine or not...

Thanks
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 3:21 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince
Replies: 7
Views: 2341

Query: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince

I'd like to see what you think about my work. Here it is. Set in the magical world of Unibeltrasia. When Prince Tamiron Lluch of the Empire of the Far East rebelled against his own, the peace and stability of the region is now in jeopardy for the fall of empire itself means the utter destruction of ...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 3:15 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: EDIT:Looking for Critique partner for Fantasy Novel(UPDATED)
Replies: 0
Views: 2513

EDIT:Looking for Critique partner for Fantasy Novel(UPDATED)

Hey, I need a critic partner for my recently finished novel. I'm still working out a few things but I do believe I need another set of eyes to do it for me. Of course I'll do that for you too. So here is the synopses of my novel: Prince Tamiron Lluch betrays the Empire of the Far East, and takes com...
by arvales12
July 9th, 2012, 3:03 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)
Replies: 3
Views: 3876

Re: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)

Now now, I know the other on is kinda long and I got carried away. I have a shorter one, about 3 paragraphs. Please I need your input in this guys. Thanks! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------...
by arvales12
July 5th, 2012, 12:49 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Do you ever sleep on it?
Replies: 14
Views: 2323

Re: Do you ever sleep on it?

It happened to me too. But not only during my sleep, when I am sitting in my porcelain throne, looking out on a bus window, just completely everything when I am away from my laptop. :x But I manage to write it down by notes so that I can use up that idea eventually. And sometimes those notes reminds...
by arvales12
July 5th, 2012, 12:37 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)
Replies: 3
Views: 3876

Unibeltrasia: The Fallen Prince Novel Synopses. (UPDATED)

Yeah, I was planning on doing a 2 paragraphed synopses but ended up doing an 8 paged one. Is is a Fantasy Adventure Novel(If you call that a category, if not, correct me please :lol: ) which has a 105k word count. Enjoy :D -----------------------------------------------------------------------------...
by arvales12
July 2nd, 2012, 1:40 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Two-Paragraph Synopsis of a Science/Fantasy w/deconstruction
Replies: 7
Views: 7367

Re: Two-Paragraph Synopsis of a Science/Fantasy w/deconstruction

Hey - generally it looks good to me. But the one thing I've vague on is the princess - who she is, what's her involvement, why she becomes involved, what she's the princess of, etc. Not to say that all of these should be explained (they souldn't in a short query or synopsis) - but the word "princes...
by arvales12
July 2nd, 2012, 1:36 pm
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Synopsis Tips.
Replies: 3
Views: 13132

Re: Synopsis Tips.

Okay Thanks! I'll do it after my week break, and after school work is done...

Thanks for the tips... :D