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by Nessa
June 15th, 2010, 4:51 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Kick-Thyself Moments
Replies: 19
Views: 6539

Re: Kick-Thyself Moments

Oh, I get lots of Dear Ms. Bransford e-mails. Best thing to remember about these things is that it happens to everyone! What makes you think those aren't on purpose Nathan? Lol, I am just kidding but seriously I had a friend that was really angry at rejections she got and made a list of certain age...
by Nessa
June 14th, 2010, 8:25 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Born to Die opening *Critique?*
Replies: 8
Views: 1620

Born to Die opening *Critique?*

Can't wait for your guys' critique. If you are also interested I am searching for a second beta for this novel. I have one awesome one but another pair of eyes never hurts. So here goes...I hope the formatting isn't screwed. Chapter 1 I concentrate as hard as I can, but I know I will never do what m...
by Nessa
June 14th, 2010, 8:21 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Is this a partial request?
Replies: 11
Views: 1785

Re: Is this a partial request?

Thanks Cafe Cliche and Ink! You see the thing I thought about was that wouldn't they just reject me if they didn't like the query if I forgot to attach the pages? That's what got me asking this in the first place. If this is a partial request then I am excited because that would be a first. lol. Tha...
by Nessa
June 14th, 2010, 7:42 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Is this a partial request?
Replies: 11
Views: 1785

Is this a partial request?

I am a newb. Don't make fun of me! lol. But is it? I am not too sure. Also if it is anyone interestd in looking over my first ten pages before I hit the dreaded send? Dear (my name) Thank you for your interest in our agency. Per Agents guidelines, please send the first ten pages of your manuscript, ...
by Nessa
June 10th, 2010, 12:57 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bron To Die - Last Take
Replies: 9
Views: 1378

Re: Bron To Die - Last Take

Hi Nessa, I'm not going to dissect your query, since others have that covered. I just wanted to throw in my two cents about the subject matter. I like the idea of escaping the concentration camp, but the battle of guns vs. magic that takes up the rest of the query doesn't intrigue me. Probably beca...
by Nessa
June 10th, 2010, 8:57 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 93711

Re: Rejection Stats

Blanche I want to know your real name too! Anyways here is a quick update on my horrid stats and the newer query I have been sending off. Dear Mr. Agent, Nayla Ebriony is a sixteen-year-old Yeeod, born without magical powers, and sent to the concentration camps where the powerless are worked to dea...
by Nessa
June 9th, 2010, 4:13 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bron To Die - Last Take
Replies: 9
Views: 1378

Re: Bron To Die - Last Take

Krista: Thanks so much for your critique! The manuscript has had many beta's so I think its in good shape :P Capaloha: Thanks so much :) Guys, here is my newest revision with both your advice in mind. Tell me what you think! Dear Agent, Nayla Ebriony is a sixteen-year-old Yeeod, born without magical...
by Nessa
June 9th, 2010, 7:16 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bron To Die - Last Take
Replies: 9
Views: 1378

Bron To Die - Last Take

REVISION DOWN BELOW!! Thank you guys so much for your help on here! Tell me what you think. I have already queried 10 queries but changed it up a bit so that I can go on... Dear Agent, Nayla Ebriony is a sixteen-year-old Yeeod, born without magical powers, and is sent to the concentration camps whe...
by Nessa
June 9th, 2010, 6:57 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Rejection Stats
Replies: 227
Views: 93711

Re: Rejection Stats

Hey there guys! I just queried my novel Born to Die last night and here are my stats and info... My Query: Dear Agent, Nayla Ebriony is a Yeeod, born without magical powers and destined to be shipped off to the concentration camps where the powerless are worked to death. When Nayla is sent to the co...
by Nessa
June 1st, 2010, 5:33 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: The Super Incredible Pre-Agent Tester!
Replies: 29
Views: 4760

Re: The Super Incredible Pre-Agent Tester!

1) Partial Request 2) Yes! I really liked your query. I hope if I am not wrong I can post my query next... Dear Agent, In a world where magicians rule, Nayla is different because she is born without powers. Those who are unable to perform magic are called Yeeods, sent off to concentration camps wher...
by Nessa
May 31st, 2010, 10:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - YEEOD
Replies: 8
Views: 1643

Re: Query - YEEOD

Thanks so much for all your guys' help! Sorry if I have some grammatical issues, I am getting it..lol. Anyways I have worked out a new revision which I hope is better. Can't wait to see what you think! Dear Agent, In a world where magicians rule, Nayla is different because she is born without powers...
by Nessa
May 17th, 2010, 3:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - YEEOD
Replies: 8
Views: 1643

Re: Query - YEEOD

Thanks FK7! I have read all the HP books and it's ot like them. More like an urban fantasy where magic is there. Thanks so much and here is a revision which hopefully better outlines the story. Dear Agent, Nayla Ebriony is born a deviation in a world where magicians rule and powerless Yeeods are sen...
by Nessa
May 17th, 2010, 9:31 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - YEEOD
Replies: 8
Views: 1643

Query - YEEOD

REVISION IS DOWN! PLEASE CRITIQUE! :) Hey guys. I know I haven't been on this forum for a while but I promise I will start posting more and critiquing as I can. But anyways I have been working on this novel for three damn years and would love for you to have a go at the query. Dear Agent, Nayla Ebr...
by Nessa
March 27th, 2010, 12:50 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: I AM ANNA - First Five Pages
Replies: 6
Views: 1624

Re: I AM ANNA - First Five Pages

kenpochick - Thanks for your reply. this is my first time with present tense at all so I am a bit of a newbie. I think I am getting the hang of it though. Thanks for your hints! Revised: I always thought my sister would be by my side, until today. I clutch the bible in my hands, willing myself not t...
by Nessa
March 26th, 2010, 9:03 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: I AM ANNA - First Five Pages
Replies: 6
Views: 1624

I AM ANNA - First Five Pages

REVISION BELOW I can use all the critique I can get. Be rough guys. What I mainly want to know is if you like it and would you continue reading this... I always thought my sister would be by my side, until today. I clutch the bible in my hands, willing myself not to cry. Standing on an elaborate al...