Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Brilliant, thanks for that, Ink. I knew I'd read about them somewhere!

Please could someone point me in the direction of Nathan's query letter examples - I've been hunting around and can't find them. Cheers!

It sounds really good! I think you have over-used the name Christie though - you could replace it with 'she' in places. Also I wouldn't end with 'Would you be interested in the manuscript' - I'd be inclined to put something more formal. I love the way you have packed so much into so few words. It ce...

Maybe I'm being frightfully British here...but I prefer to get up, get dressed (into something co-ordinated), brush my teeth, do my hair and make up (lipstick included), have some toast and coffee and THEN I'm ready to write - phew! Somehow if I feel untidy and messy my writing becomes untidy and me...

Hi,
A very concise Query. Well done on that! (Think I need to cut mine down now!)

My only thought after reading is...

unfortunately it’s money Derek no longer has.

Why does the MC no longer have the money? Would the reader/agent benefit from a little expansion here?

I have read and followed your posts and your Query piece just gets better and better! I hope you don't mind, but I have taken the liberty of tweeking in the hope of improving it further..... Audrey Frincke is a lonely twenty-something hacker living in her uncle's house in the Boston suburbs. Shot at...

Sounds like an interesting and well thought out storyline. I like all the changes you have made so far - to me it makes it easier to understand what is going on in your MS. However, I'd be tempted to change around the information in your last paragraph so that it isn't as easily confused with the ex...

I've been teaching children (of all ages) for almost fifteen years now. The thing that really gets me going is Creative Writing - you can have so much fun with it. Problem is, I've spent so long using other Authors' books and extracts to highlight particular lesson objectives, I now moan - the old '...