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by SplitInfinitive
March 28th, 2012, 5:27 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short
Replies: 8
Views: 5962

Re: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short

Hi Steve, I think this looks great. You get a strong sense of the character and the setting. Since I have no structural comments, I'll just note that I think you're looking for "there" rather than "their" in the first sentence of the last full paragraph. And you might consider making earpiece one wo...
by SplitInfinitive
March 28th, 2012, 4:58 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 3121

Re: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction

Thanks Trw! I'll send you a note as well. It's relatively short, after this last round of revisions, it should come in around 55K.
by SplitInfinitive
March 24th, 2012, 5:38 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 3121

Re: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction

Thanks! I sent you a message to arrange a swap. - SI
by SplitInfinitive
March 22nd, 2012, 5:46 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner
Replies: 3
Views: 1743

Re: Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner

I agree, I think the story sounds compelling, and for this query I would work on beginning with and maintaining a more active voice: When the crops fail on the Bleamy family farm during the drought of 1802, eleven-year-old Jeremy Bleamy and his parents are forced to leave their belongings, their dog...
by SplitInfinitive
March 22nd, 2012, 1:35 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 3121

Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction

Well this seems to be the saddest category on the forum in terms of responses, but I'll give it a shot just in case. I'm in the final stages of preparing my manuscript before sending it out to agents and would love to have some objective feedback from someone interested in multiple perspective liter...