Thanks for your comments guys/gals - really helpful.
The offending phrase is going in the bin on grounds of dullness/telling-ness/POV switch. Onwards and upwards...
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- April 24th, 2012, 12:14 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: POV - 3rd person slipping to omni??
- Replies: 5
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- April 20th, 2012, 6:35 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: POV - 3rd person slipping to omni??
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POV - 3rd person slipping to omni??
Hi all Could I have your thoughts on this: My MS is written in 3rd person close POV: the reader (er…me) sees only what the MC sees, only hears her internal thoughts. I have a scene where the MC reads a story from the newspaper (containing an Important Revelation (!)) out loud to friends. The next li...
- April 19th, 2012, 10:41 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Help! My main character has no character
- Replies: 9
- Views: 1711
Re: Help! My main character has no character
Thanks guys - all really helpful stuff (especially the bit about cookies!)
- February 13th, 2012, 11:18 am
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Help! My main character has no character
- Replies: 9
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Help! My main character has no character
Hey Bransforummers - I'd really appreciate your thoughts on the following problem I'm having with my (first) M/S: My MS is young adult fiction with a time travel theme. My main character is a 16 year old girl living in contemporary times. She has two sidekicks (same age as her): a boy also from 'now...