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by A La Vanille
February 21st, 2011, 3:54 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden
Replies: 12
Views: 2214

Re: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden

Thank you all for your comments! Here is the revised query based on what you said and as you can tell, it's quite different from the original. If you would like me to look at your query in return, I'd be glad to (especially if you write YA!). Just give me the link or send it through a private messag...
by A La Vanille
February 16th, 2011, 1:23 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden
Replies: 12
Views: 2214

Re: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden

Gentlemen only, ladies forbidden? Beatrice Roland won’t take that kind of crap, especially from that chauvinistic boy, Leighton Ross, who believes she should step off the golf course for good and put on a bikini instead. Like the opening! Good voice. I'd probably tighten and take out the words "for...
by A La Vanille
February 16th, 2011, 1:21 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden
Replies: 12
Views: 2214

Re: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden

It seems disorganized. It looks like you might have a good story in here, but it seems to jump around. Try to make it consistent and flow. At times I think this is a legitimate story of women overcoming sexism and exclusion, and at times it reads like kids slinging insults on the playground. I real...
by A La Vanille
February 14th, 2011, 8:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden
Replies: 12
Views: 2214

Query - Gentlemen Only, Ladies Forbidden

REVISED QUERY ON POST NINE. THANK YOU. Hello there! Thank you for taking a look at my query. Any suggestions/revisions/edits you can make will be appreciated. Be as honest as you can. Also, if you were a literary agent, would you ask to read more or give a form rejection? Thank you, here it is: Dea...
by A La Vanille
January 4th, 2011, 4:06 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: DARK, DARK LUCK, a YA urban Fantasy
Replies: 12
Views: 1868

Re: DARK, DARK LUCK, a YA urban Fantasy

Dear agent, Cash Flaherty is fed up with his small Texas town and the office-bound future that’s mapped out for him. To break away, the seventeen-year-old books summer school in Ireland. It pisses off his workaholic dad, Not exactly sure how it can piss off his workaholic dad? Is it money problems?...
by A La Vanille
December 23rd, 2010, 3:12 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Why we love bad writing
Replies: 20
Views: 5425

Re: Why we love bad writing

To those that have replied to me: Ah, well. We all have different opinions of "good writing". Some of us prefer a story well executed, and others prefer a simple writing style. I personally prefer to read a story with not just good characters or good plot, but also with a wonderful writing style. Fo...
by A La Vanille
December 22nd, 2010, 2:48 am
Forum: Books
Topic: Why we love bad writing
Replies: 20
Views: 5425

Re: Why we love bad writing

Wow. Well, I suppose I agree with this. Humanity is acquiring more indolence every generation. My classmates despise literary merit books, and they hate analyzing the skillfully woven symbolism, metaphors, and social commentary along with them. They prefer reads in simplistic, straightforward langua...
by A La Vanille
December 22nd, 2010, 2:42 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Impatience.
Replies: 8
Views: 1384

Re: Impatience.

I do have impatience. I am impatient to finish my novel, yet I am being horribly counterproductive and not writing anything. It's all my fault, really. I have all the time in the world. I suppose you could say I am calm, and not quite too eager. Anyways, I would agree with your spouse. It's best to ...
by A La Vanille
June 3rd, 2010, 4:25 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: One Liners
Replies: 19
Views: 3419

Re: One Liners

My only suggestion would be to try and make it shorter, ideally fewer than 15 words. You could do this by taking out the "named Sarah" and rolling "kidnapping, murders, rape, and the occasional free drug hand out " down to one or two words that pretty much wraps up all that (not sure if you could fi...
by A La Vanille
January 14th, 2010, 9:56 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How to Write a Perfect(ly) Dreadful Query Letter
Replies: 5
Views: 1155

Re: How to Write a Perfect(ly) Dreadful Query Letter

Infomative and hilariously funny at the same time!
Love it!
by A La Vanille
December 31st, 2009, 2:33 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How many of you belong to non-web critique groups?
Replies: 16
Views: 3166

Re: How many of you belong to non-web critique groups?

Hmm... I'm in a creative writing club. I don't know if I'd call it a critique group, because after someone reads their stuff, we usually clap and the leader of our group usually says something like, "That was awesome." We don't really critique, I think it's because we're too nice. I'm really disappo...
by A La Vanille
December 31st, 2009, 2:30 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: A shallow book - what to do?
Replies: 14
Views: 2938

Re: A shallow book - what to do?

I agree with Mira, put down the book and get to working with the next one. A few weeks after Nanowrimo, I began to reread my book. It gave me a headache. I didn't want to read it anymore. I was very discouraged at these feelings. So, I stored it safely away in my USB drive thinga-ma-bobber (always a...
by A La Vanille
December 31st, 2009, 2:23 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: How do you write?
Replies: 15
Views: 2826

Re: How do you write?

I tried that technique once - the one where you don't write in order. Did not work. I like to write in sequence because as I'm writing, I want it to be like I'm growing up with my characters, you know? Living their lives with them. (Not that I'm saying I've created a Mary Sue). When writing in order...
by A La Vanille
December 26th, 2009, 3:53 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: What are you reading now?
Replies: 520
Views: 133925

Re: What are you reading now?

I'm reading Crime and Punishment.
The other book I was supposed to be reading bored me, I even forgot the title so I can't post it here.
by A La Vanille
December 26th, 2009, 3:48 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Sam said vs. said Sam
Replies: 10
Views: 1906

Re: Sam said vs. said Sam

I was having the same issues. At first I thought it HAD to be said Sam. Once I thought that, I turned all the dialogue things in my novel into said Sam, though not particularly with the name Sam. Then, I read more books and realize it doesn't matter. That made me feel better, but then I got angry be...