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by steveyodascott76
December 31st, 2011, 9:00 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Rewrite of partial 1st chapter
Replies: 10
Views: 2237

Re: Partial 1st chapter of "Eternal Question"

Hey Mark, Thanks again for the feedback. Here is my critique. Steve Chapter 1 Hanging By a Thread The worn wipers streaked across Melinda's windshield with a screech, leaving dollops of rain and scattered bits of dried leaves behind. This may be a matter of preference, but it seems that for an openi...
by steveyodascott76
December 30th, 2011, 5:59 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Paradise
Replies: 4
Views: 1315

Re: Paradise

My thoughts are below. I wrote them as I read. Hope they help! An official policy of racial segregation formerly practiced in the Republic of South-Africa, involving political, legal and economic discrimination against non-whites. Johan didn’t know if he had any right to think, never mind say this,...
by steveyodascott76
December 30th, 2011, 5:10 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short
Replies: 8
Views: 5984

Re: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short

Thanks for the reply. Glad to hear someone connect with the style given the story. I've had concerns it might be a bit too stylized. Thanks for the spelling correction too. I'll fix that right away.

Steve
by steveyodascott76
December 30th, 2011, 2:22 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short
Replies: 8
Views: 5984

First 500 Words of a Sci Fi Short

This is the opening to a short scifi story I'm working on. Would love feedback and critique. Currently I have no title... (Title suggestions welcomed.) Thank you much (And of course I will return the favor)! (Latest Edits in blue) Steve No one really knows how or when it began. That’s the way with t...