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by Walker
March 1st, 2012, 11:37 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: *Revised* QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR
Replies: 40
Views: 7151

Re: QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR

This sounds like my kind of story! I have some comments and I hope they are helpful. Newly revised ** Dear Ms. Agent: Lillim Callina should be dead. She still would be if her ruthless former mentor, Warthor, hadn’t sacrificed all of her friends to bring her back to life. Since then she’s been runni...
by Walker
March 1st, 2012, 11:30 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Re: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6

Lil, 4Helen, thanks for taking the time to comment. 4Helen, I did revise the query in post 6. If you have time, I'd love to hear what you think. Lil, the Monster feels like he wants to die because he is alone and feared. Maybe that did not come across. The reason he does not let himself be killed? B...
by Walker
February 22nd, 2012, 11:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Buy Lovely Jade Ring
Replies: 3
Views: 892

Re: Buy Lovely Jade Ring

I don't understand the premise of your story, but I get the feeling a jade ring is somehow involved.... :lol:
by Walker
February 22nd, 2012, 11:35 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Re: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again

Thanks Wilderness, I do appreciate you taking the time to comment. I'm going to try to smooth it out a bit more, and then it's -gasp! - time to start sending it out. I need to put on my flame-proof, extra-thick skin....
by Walker
February 18th, 2012, 2:05 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Re: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again

Here's a revision. I'd appreciate any comments . In 1887, the Frankenstein Monster spends his days in a cave high in the Austrian Alps, isolating himself from a world that fears him. He wishes for the peace that only death can bring, but the method of his creation that made him gruesome also made h...
by Walker
February 15th, 2012, 10:00 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Re: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again

Hi Wilderness, thank you so much for taking the time to read my query. I'm glad you like the idea. I have been struggling with what to include (and not include) in the query, and how to get across the action element as well as the personal element, of the Monster regaining his humanity. Father Strau...
by Walker
February 15th, 2012, 12:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Never Remember *Revised*
Replies: 16
Views: 2842

Re: Query: Never Remember *Revised*

Hi Moni12. I hope I can offer some useful comments. While trying to find her memories, Devi must come to terms with the fact that she may always be nothing more than a stranger to herself. She lives in the isolation of the woods with the occasional company of Bren, but he isn’t there for nothing. "...
by Walker
February 14th, 2012, 9:26 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: What is your writing weakness? (Let's call this therapy)
Replies: 54
Views: 13470

Re: What is your writing weakness? (Let's call this therapy)

My writing weakness would be my inner editor. I can't NOT reread the last page I wrote before continuing on. And I can't NOT edit it when a place catches my eye where I can improve. But hey, I'm getting better. At least now it's only the last page. It used to be the whole last chapter. No wonder I ...
by Walker
February 2nd, 2012, 2:59 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Re: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again

Oldhousejunkie, I appreciate you taking the time to give me some feedback. Regarding the subplots, I was trying to keep the query brief, but I realize now that it may be too brief. All of the characters mentioned do have important roles to play and I can see that I should probably explain them a bit...
by Walker
February 1st, 2012, 3:10 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: THE COLOR OF THE SOUL
Replies: 4
Views: 1121

Re: Query: THE COLOR OF THE SOUL

Hi Amirsdaddy, I like the first two paragraphs of your query. You give us just enough info to be intrigued without telling too much of the story. I do think the third paragraph has a little too much hyperbole and could be reeled in a bit. Also, 40,000 words seems awfully short. Otherwise I thought i...
by Walker
February 1st, 2012, 3:02 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Writer's block
Replies: 5
Views: 1048

Re: Writer's block

I find my subconscious is the best friend I have when things aren't working. If I sit and try to figure things out, it usually results in just frustration. But if I get away from the writing, I find the solution to my problem comes to me when I am doing something else -driving on my commute, taking ...
by Walker
February 1st, 2012, 10:18 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: What is your writing weakness? (Let's call this therapy)
Replies: 54
Views: 13470

Re: What is your writing weakness? (Let's call this therapy)

Sign me in as part of the self-doubt crew. It was so crippling back when I was in my twenties that I never finished anything, and gave up writing for more than ten years. Now that I am older and wiser, I am not so hyper-critical, but I still have many days where I read what I've written and say, "Th...
by Walker
January 30th, 2012, 10:23 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6
Replies: 10
Views: 2171

Query: Frankenstein's Monster: Undead Again -revised post 6

Hey folks -it seems like I've been working on this query forever. I'm so close to it now I've lost all objectivity. Please look it over and tell me what you think. After years of self-imposed isolation from a world that despises him, an attack by creatures born of forbidden science spurs the immorta...
by Walker
January 20th, 2012, 2:38 pm
Forum: Books
Topic: Best Dystopian Novels
Replies: 15
Views: 6822

Re: Best Dystopian Novels

I found both The Road and The Handmaid's Tale very hard reads (emotionally). There were times with The Road that I'd have to put the book down for a day or so before I got back to it. I wouldn't say it depressed me but it certainly had an effect on me. I felt the same with the movie version only to ...
by Walker
January 20th, 2012, 2:30 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE
Replies: 12
Views: 2283

Re: Horror Query HONOR: A ZOMBIE TALE

Anyway, yes, I think I missed the thread of my own story in this first query. It isn't about the massive global apocalypse or the government/media response. It's about a single family recreating and preserving the best of what it is do be human as society is wiped away. I'm finding this too when I ...