Nathan Bransford - The Forums

Hello, I really have NO business giving query suggestions, but I will look at this as if I was reading the book jacket wondering if I should buy your book. :) On November 11th, 2011, televangelist Charles Foster Wallace announced to the world his intention to create a god machine, a machine of inde...

Thanks Kabbu! Those are great suggestions.

Dana

another try... Dear Agent , In 1952 Texas, ten-year-old Allan spends his days looking for excitement and the next big adventure. Capture a blood-spitting horny toad. Check. Watch the scariest movie to come to town. Check. Come up with a story good enough to win a contest. Check. Ride a bucking bron...

Thank you for commenting! I agree with having fewer adventures listed - I'm wondering which ones to keep. I may ask a few kids which ones are most enticing to them.

I'll keep working - but I'm a more excited about this direction than I have been in the past! Thanks!!

Okay, I've decided to completely re-write, rather than just revise. All comments welcome! Dear Agent, In 1952 Texas, ten-year-old Allan spends his days looking for excitement and the next big adventure. Capture blood-spitting horny toads. Check. Watch the scariest movie to come to the Texas Theatre...

Thanks for your comments, Wilderness. I'll keep working on it.

Okay, I've re-worked my query a bit. My goal was to make the query letter just as appealing to the MG audience as the book itself. I'd appreciate any and all thoughts. Thanks! Dear (agent's name), 1952 Texas is a boy’s paradise providing ten-year-old Allan with endless adventure. Allan spends most ...

Thanks! I honestly had not thought about writing the query from Allan's POV - to appeal to the MG audience. I'll work on this.

Hello, I am on my 5th revision of my novel (40,000 word count). It is a humorous, yet tender, coming-of-age novel based on the stories my father told me while growing up in Texas in the early 1950s. I am currently a school counselor and I have published academic articles during my former life as a c...

Hello! I'd love any thoughts on my query letter. I'm worried it sounds boring. Thanks so much! Dear Agent, 1952 Texas is a boy’s paradise providing ten-year-old Allan with endless adventure. But when his mother becomes ill, Allan discovers it’s not excitement he longs for, but the comfort of family...

Title: Riding the Dam Genre: MG Humor, coming-of-age It was a day like any other summer day in San Angelo—hot, dry, and full of possibilities. Today was the day Raymond and I were going to ride the dam. This was not just any dam, but the biggest dam in the world. I never questioned this fact, but si...