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by theresatroutman
February 1st, 2012, 9:23 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA
Replies: 10
Views: 2149

Re: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA

I've been reading everything I can get my hands on regarding queries and have taken the feedback into account. Hopefully the following is better and more concise. Thank you! In 1985 London, seventeen-year-old Sebastian Irons’ life was planned out for him from birth by his domineering mother. He woul...
by theresatroutman
October 25th, 2011, 11:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA
Replies: 10
Views: 2149

Re: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA

Thanks to everyone who has commented so far. I have taken your suggestions and revised below. :D In 1985 London, Sebastian Irons’ friend drops dead after a drug binge during Sebastian's wild eighteen birthday party. In an instant, Sebastian's carefree days of drinking, drugs and promiscuous sex are ...
by theresatroutman
October 25th, 2011, 9:30 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Avarice's Hoard - YA
Replies: 2
Views: 630

Re: Query: Avarice's Hoard - YA

When JJ, a Manhattan high school senior, finds and delivers a mysterious letter, he is unwillingly thrust into the heart of a conspiracy led by the dragon living under Central Park. If he finds the letter, how does he know who to delievry it to? Is he forced to deliver the letter? Identified as the...
by theresatroutman
October 21st, 2011, 3:27 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Opening of The Tory's Daughter
Replies: 4
Views: 1480

Re: Opening of The Tory's Daughter

June, 1775 The hot and stifling air in Virginia threatened a storm. Abigail Randals nibbled on her lips as she looked around Raleigh’s Tavern. Beneath the dim, yellow light of the candles and the sound of the violin, she felt that the air was heavy with tension. Her own anxiety swelled within her, a...
by theresatroutman
October 19th, 2011, 11:34 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA
Replies: 10
Views: 2149

Re: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA

Thanks for the feedback. I like what you said about "who are the people who teach Sebastian about loyalty, love and truth," but I wonder if this part is better suited for the synopsis? I've taken suggestions and revised per below. In 1985 London, seventeen-year-old Sebastian Irons got through life u...
by theresatroutman
October 18th, 2011, 9:15 pm
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Synopsis - query duality??
Replies: 5
Views: 1570

Re: Synopsis - query duality??

Think of the query as your "elevator pitch." You want to hook the potential agent and intrigue them to want to read your book.
The synopsis will give the overview of the entire story (beginning, middle and end)

Good Luck!
by theresatroutman
October 15th, 2011, 9:39 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query:Life's What You Make It - YA
Replies: 10
Views: 2149

Query:Life's What You Make It - YA

I am looking to publish my first novel and would love some feedback on my query letter. Thanks for your time! Theresa Dear Agent, In 1985 London, seventeen-year-old Sebastian Irons got through life using his good looks, English charm and his family’s fortune. The world was his for the taking so Seba...