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- February 7th, 2013, 1:14 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
- Replies: 25
- Views: 15524
Re: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
Well, it's been three years since I last posted on this thread and the forums. If any of you are still around, I wanted to tell you thank you once again for all your help with my query. The suggestions you made helped me focus my story in addition to the query. I'm happy to announce that my debut sc...
- September 10th, 2010, 10:54 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183625
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear ____________, Personal reason why I chose above agent goes here. Sendek is a complete science fantasy novel of approximately 84,000 words. In a world that tried to crush all forms of magic in favor of science, astronomer Talia Shannon is trapped. Her prophetic nightmares point to an approaching...
- May 23rd, 2010, 9:04 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3197
Re: My Brain is going to explode!
They say write even when you don't feel like it, but they also say take a break. I love this subjective career I've chosen. Basically, our futures are in our hands. Work like crazy...take a break...work like crazy...live some life...
Gotta love it! Good luck on your exams.
Gotta love it! Good luck on your exams.
- May 21st, 2010, 4:24 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3197
Re: My Brain is going to explode!
Thanks for the suggestions. I watched 3 episodes of Angel today on Netflix instead of revising. Brain feels better. :)
- May 20th, 2010, 8:35 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3197
My Brain is going to explode!
I've avoided all the forums for almost a month to revise my WIP. I'm on page 275 out of 295. My brain is mush, I'm wandering the web. Reading up on the industry is not good for me right now. Please, send me somewhere fun so I can laugh and regain my balance! (I've been killing people, subjecting my ...
- April 7th, 2010, 9:20 am
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3694
Re: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
First of all, thank you to everyone for your comments. It is all good food for thought. Hillsy , thanks for the break down critique. That is really helpful. She calls them death because at this point she doesn't know what the name of the creatures is. Only that whenever they appear she always dies, ...
- April 6th, 2010, 5:56 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3694
Re: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Thanks! I've struggled with where to put things in this first scene. I'm glad "enough to save me this time" made you think she had died before, because she has many times. ;)
- April 6th, 2010, 4:20 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3694
First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Looking for critique on my first 13 lines. Would this grab your interest? Would you keep reading? See anything that should be tightened? Blinking did not make the darkness lighter. Reaching out, I felt the damp roughness of sandstone as little bits of earth flaked off. When I stepped forward the wat...
- March 29th, 2010, 1:55 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: Worst Query Competition
- Replies: 29
- Views: 10414
Re: Worst Query Competition
Erica75, LOVE IT! That's what runs through my head every time I think about sending out queries. Everyone else, I've sat here laughing and successfully procrastinating for a full 20 minutes. Thanks! I think you are all brilliant and surprised you aren't published yet. You're really holding out on us...
- March 23rd, 2010, 1:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance--revised
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4463
Re: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance
I really struggle with how much to reveal in queries. In the book, it's a big reveal halfway through, and until then it's not apparent whether he's even alive/comatose/existing in the real world. In the synopsis, I lay it right out there, but in the query? I feel totally stuck. Should I give away e...
- March 22nd, 2010, 2:32 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance--revised
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4463
Re: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance
I can't stare at this any longer. Thanks in advance for any and all feedback! I understand your pain, and will do my best for whatever it is worth. Dear Agent, In the aftermath of the horrific ( Is there any other kind)? car accident that killed her sister and nearly took her life, Sasha Bennett ro...
- March 16th, 2010, 1:51 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Share your opening sentence!
- Replies: 236
- Views: 86226
Re: Share your opening sentence!
Wow, there are some great first lines in here and I think I would continue reading most of them.
Here is mine:
Blinking did not make the darkness lighter.
Here is mine:
Blinking did not make the darkness lighter.
- March 12th, 2010, 1:38 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - "Tribal New Begining"
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3110
Re: Query - "Tribal New Begining"
I like to comment as I read. :) Sorry if I repeat what others have said, I haven't read the other comments yet. I find this helps me say what I really think. Hope it helps, and please remember it is just one opinion. Dear Specific Agent, Back from a six month trip, Terra, a world traveling cross-cul...
- March 12th, 2010, 1:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: QUERY: Playing God
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3932
Re: QUERY: Playing God
I have not read the other comments so if I repeat what has been said, I apologize. I like to comment as I read it to let you know my first initial reaction to things. Hope it helps, and remember it is just my opinion. Dear XXXX: Agent Fern has lost all control of his time-travel device. After being ...
- March 12th, 2010, 12:32 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8398
Re: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!
I purposely did not read any of the other comments, so if I repeat what has already been said, I apologize. Also, these are just my opinions and reactions as I read, for whatever they are worth. If my comments seem overly nitpicky, it is because those kinds of comments have helped me the most when p...