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by charity_bradford
February 7th, 2013, 1:14 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2
Replies: 25
Views: 8112

Re: Query--Sendek--3rd revision page 2

Well, it's been three years since I last posted on this thread and the forums. If any of you are still around, I wanted to tell you thank you once again for all your help with my query. The suggestions you made helped me focus my story in addition to the query. I'm happy to announce that my debut sc...
by charity_bradford
September 10th, 2010, 10:54 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 213
Views: 116356

Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog

Dear ____________, Personal reason why I chose above agent goes here. Sendek is a complete science fantasy novel of approximately 84,000 words. In a world that tried to crush all forms of magic in favor of science, astronomer Talia Shannon is trapped. Her prophetic nightmares point to an approaching...
by charity_bradford
May 23rd, 2010, 9:04 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
Replies: 8
Views: 1235

Re: My Brain is going to explode!

They say write even when you don't feel like it, but they also say take a break. I love this subjective career I've chosen. Basically, our futures are in our hands. Work like crazy...take a break...work like crazy...live some life...

Gotta love it! Good luck on your exams.
by charity_bradford
May 21st, 2010, 4:24 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
Replies: 8
Views: 1235

Re: My Brain is going to explode!

Thanks for the suggestions. I watched 3 episodes of Angel today on Netflix instead of revising. Brain feels better. :)
by charity_bradford
May 20th, 2010, 8:35 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: My Brain is going to explode!
Replies: 8
Views: 1235

My Brain is going to explode!

I've avoided all the forums for almost a month to revise my WIP. I'm on page 275 out of 295. My brain is mush, I'm wandering the web. Reading up on the industry is not good for me right now. Please, send me somewhere fun so I can laugh and regain my balance! (I've been killing people, subjecting my ...
by charity_bradford
April 7th, 2010, 9:20 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Replies: 8
Views: 1467

Re: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy

First of all, thank you to everyone for your comments. It is all good food for thought. Hillsy , thanks for the break down critique. That is really helpful. She calls them death because at this point she doesn't know what the name of the creatures is. Only that whenever they appear she always dies, ...
by charity_bradford
April 6th, 2010, 5:56 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Replies: 8
Views: 1467

Re: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy

Thanks! I've struggled with where to put things in this first scene. I'm glad "enough to save me this time" made you think she had died before, because she has many times. ;)
by charity_bradford
April 6th, 2010, 4:20 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy
Replies: 8
Views: 1467

First 13--SENDEK Science Fantasy

Looking for critique on my first 13 lines. Would this grab your interest? Would you keep reading? See anything that should be tightened? Blinking did not make the darkness lighter. Reaching out, I felt the damp roughness of sandstone as little bits of earth flaked off. When I stepped forward the wat...
by charity_bradford
March 29th, 2010, 1:55 pm
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Worst Query Competition
Replies: 29
Views: 4796

Re: Worst Query Competition

Erica75, LOVE IT! That's what runs through my head every time I think about sending out queries. Everyone else, I've sat here laughing and successfully procrastinating for a full 20 minutes. Thanks! I think you are all brilliant and surprised you aren't published yet. You're really holding out on us...
by charity_bradford
March 23rd, 2010, 1:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance--revised
Replies: 11
Views: 2075

Re: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance

I really struggle with how much to reveal in queries. In the book, it's a big reveal halfway through, and until then it's not apparent whether he's even alive/comatose/existing in the real world. In the synopsis, I lay it right out there, but in the query? I feel totally stuck. Should I give away e...
by charity_bradford
March 22nd, 2010, 2:32 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance--revised
Replies: 11
Views: 2075

Re: Query critique: Ether, paranormal romance

I can't stare at this any longer. Thanks in advance for any and all feedback! I understand your pain, and will do my best for whatever it is worth. Dear Agent, In the aftermath of the horrific ( Is there any other kind)? car accident that killed her sister and nearly took her life, Sasha Bennett ro...
by charity_bradford
March 16th, 2010, 1:51 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Share your opening sentence!
Replies: 236
Views: 38156

Re: Share your opening sentence!

Wow, there are some great first lines in here and I think I would continue reading most of them.

Here is mine:
Blinking did not make the darkness lighter.
by charity_bradford
March 12th, 2010, 1:38 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - "Tribal New Begining"
Replies: 6
Views: 1238

Re: Query - "Tribal New Begining"

I like to comment as I read. :) Sorry if I repeat what others have said, I haven't read the other comments yet. I find this helps me say what I really think. Hope it helps, and please remember it is just one opinion. Dear Specific Agent, Back from a six month trip, Terra, a world traveling cross-cul...
by charity_bradford
March 12th, 2010, 1:19 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: QUERY: Playing God
Replies: 8
Views: 1742

Re: QUERY: Playing God

I have not read the other comments so if I repeat what has been said, I apologize. I like to comment as I read it to let you know my first initial reaction to things. Hope it helps, and remember it is just my opinion. Dear XXXX: Agent Fern has lost all control of his time-travel device. After being ...
by charity_bradford
March 12th, 2010, 12:32 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!
Replies: 24
Views: 3367

Re: Does this opening hook you? *Jelly Beans for replies!

I purposely did not read any of the other comments, so if I repeat what has already been said, I apologize. Also, these are just my opinions and reactions as I read, for whatever they are worth. If my comments seem overly nitpicky, it is because those kinds of comments have helped me the most when p...