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by simonmabee
September 29th, 2011, 2:18 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: SYNOPSIS: Prince of Trouble - alt history/sci fi
Replies: 4
Views: 3570

Re: SYNOPSIS: Prince of Trouble - alt history/sci fi

The biggest thing that I've ever heard on thinking of a plot is you have to get out of the "and then" mentality Every time there is transition it should be able to flow with a "therefore" or a "but". Stupid example. George woke up. Therefore he took a shower. But, there was a giant spider in the sho...
by simonmabee
September 23rd, 2011, 2:22 am
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 237881

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: Don't Mess With Canada Genre: Humor July 8, 2017. Calcutta, India. “Black Sheep this is Uncle Tom standby while we await operational confirmation from Papa Smurf, over.” This is not a happy story. “Roger that Uncle Tom, the herd is in position and awaiting the signal, over.” This is the story...
by simonmabee
September 22nd, 2011, 3:57 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Prologue - Diary of an escaped con
Replies: 6
Views: 1333

Re: Prologue - Diary of an escaped con

Instead of Germans at the time he likely would have referred to them as Fritz, Huns, Heinie, Kraut, or Boche (but that was mostly french. Maybe Jerries but that was more WWII though saw some in WWI since they did introduce the helmet style in late WWI.
by simonmabee
August 27th, 2011, 4:13 pm
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Don't Mess With Canada
Replies: 2
Views: 894

Re: Ch. 1, humor story

The second ch. is done and has been added above. School just started so I don't have as much time to be active on here, but I'll do what I can to contribute to others.
by simonmabee
August 17th, 2011, 5:22 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Don't Mess With Canada
Replies: 2
Views: 894

Don't Mess With Canada

First section. It's a little long. Any and all feedback is greatly appreciated. This is the story of Canada's attempt to kill the president and the U.S. officials incompetent attempts to stop them. Don’t Mess With Canada July 8, 2017. Calcutta, India. “Black Sheep this is Uncle Tom standby while we ...