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by piers
August 21st, 2011, 1:03 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Color of Gothic /Paranormal Western - updated version
Replies: 17
Views: 3892

Re: Color of Gothic /Paranormal Western - REVISED

I really like this query. You make it look easy- clean and neat and we know what the story is. I also think the line 'he knows more than his name' is easy to understand and more interesting than the others suggested.
by piers
August 21st, 2011, 12:42 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: 'Playing Games' YA Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 3
Views: 827

Query: 'Playing Games' YA Contemporary Fiction

I queried this around a bit a few months ago, but I've kind of lost faith in it. Any advice is appreciated. Thanks in advance. I'm currently seeking an agent to represent my 61k Young Adult Contemporary Novel Playing Games. An internet search for Embry Blaine produces 32 million results. Taylor Chat...
by piers
August 5th, 2011, 11:12 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Untitled Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 1384

Re: Query: 'Barbarian' (WT): Contemporary Fiction

Hi Piers. I'm by no means an expert, but I'll put in my two cents. First off, this reads more than an excerpt from a synopsis rather than a query. You've only got a short page to hook the agent's attention - use it wisely! As I read the first paragraph, I thought this was a non-fiction title - one ...
by piers
August 4th, 2011, 11:25 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: DREAMSEA, YA Urban Fantasy
Replies: 4
Views: 1002

Re: Query: DREAMSEA, YA Urban Fantasy

I always make the mistake of reading other people's critiques first, and then agreeing with them. I just wanted to say that I also like the premise. My advice would be just to sharpen it up and clarify a bit, particularly at the end where it gets a bit murky. I don't envy people who have to query b...
by piers
August 4th, 2011, 11:17 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - Somewhere In Between - YA urban fantasy *Revised*
Replies: 9
Views: 1590

Re: Query - Somewhere In Between - YA urban fantasy

I would be so grateful for any help you guys could give me! Who knew a one page query would be even harder to write than an entire novel! Dear (Agent), (Something personal about specific agent). Because of this I’m hoping you will be interested in my urban fantasy novel for young adults, SOMEWHERE ...
by piers
August 4th, 2011, 11:11 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Untitled Contemporary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 1384

Query: Untitled Contemporary Fiction

I really appreciate all the good advice, it made me realize I need to go back and work on my manuscript. : ) Thanks again.