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by vivalasbradleys
June 30th, 2011, 7:13 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 274774

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: SHAKA LAKA PAPA Genre: Mystery/caper Word count: 244 A “crack,” then the papaya exploded. Seeds and pulp pelted the dude. He hit the deck when another shot clipped a small branch from the tree. “ Yamete .” The voice came from somewhere out there, in the rain. He hugged the ground, thought abo...
by vivalasbradleys
June 30th, 2011, 7:07 pm
Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Replies: 720
Views: 274774

Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog

Title: LOCO MOCO MAMA Genre: Mystery/caper Word count: 236 Edna Norquist was on her deathbed in Needles, California, which meant Ryan Campanella had to act fast before the old bat kicked off. * * * The Norquist estate, a large ranch house and an acre and a half of green lawn and rose gardens, sat ne...