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- May 10th, 2012, 5:52 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Revised Query: Brotherly Love
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1808
Revised Query: Brotherly Love
Thanks for the feedback. I've done a little more research and a lot of revision. Please let me know what you think. John H Subject: Query – Literary Fiction When eighteen-year-old Will and sixteen-year-old Annie fall in love, there is a major complication – he is her adopted brother. BROTHERLY LOVE,...
- December 3rd, 2011, 7:34 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: How to handle request for an exclusive read
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3717
Re: How to handle request for an exclusive read
Thank you all for the advice.
Cheeky - thanks so much for the insightful feedback you gave me on my query letter. That's what did it!
John H
Cheeky - thanks so much for the insightful feedback you gave me on my query letter. That's what did it!
John H
- November 30th, 2011, 12:47 pm
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: How to handle request for an exclusive read
- Replies: 5
- Views: 3717
How to handle request for an exclusive read
I need some advice - I got a query response from Elizabeth Pomada at Larsen Pomada Literary. She requested that I send her my book for review on an exclusive basis. Is there a standard period that the exclusivity should last? I don't want to take my book off the table for an indeterminate period of ...
- November 22nd, 2011, 6:18 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: REVISED Query - ANNIE AND WILL
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1295
REVISED Query - ANNIE AND WILL
Thanks for the feedback - I've done my best to incorporate into my new letter. Dear Ms. Agent, Will’s mother is dying and wants to secure a future for her ten-year-old son. The single-mother has no family to turn to, so she brings Will to her hometown where she hopes the Gundersons will become Will’...
- November 21st, 2011, 8:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for ANNIE AND WILL
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1558
Re: Query for ANNIE AND WILL
I can't thank you enough for your in-depth, thoughtful critique.
Your suggestions are spot-on. I'll be back at work on it tomorrow.
Thanks again for giving me your time, expertise, and valuable advice.
John H
Your suggestions are spot-on. I'll be back at work on it tomorrow.
Thanks again for giving me your time, expertise, and valuable advice.
John H
- November 21st, 2011, 6:04 pm
- Forum: Excerpts
- Topic: Two pages of ANNIE AND WILL
- Replies: 1
- Views: 2045
Two pages of ANNIE AND WILL
Would like some feedback on my prologue and first page. It's about a girl and her adopted brother falling in love. (Just posted query letter also.) Thanks so much. PROLOGUE 1947 “Well, Janet, I can tell you beyond the shadow of a reasonable doubt that you are, as your mother would so delicately put ...
- November 21st, 2011, 2:07 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for ANNIE AND WILL
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1558
Query for ANNIE AND WILL
I took to heart the suggestions several of you offered and have implemented them in my new query letter. I'd love feedback on this effort. Subject line of email: Annie and Will, her adopted brother, have fallen in love. All hell is about to break loose. Dear Ms. Agent, Janet Powers is dying and want...
- June 25th, 2011, 9:58 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2388
Re: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
Thank you so much for the enlightening and comprehensive review. I appreciate the time you took and your insights. My next version will reflect many of your suggestions.
Sincerely,
John H
Sincerely,
John H
- June 24th, 2011, 3:58 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
- Replies: 4
- Views: 2388
Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
Would really like to get feedback on my query letter. I'm new to the game and this is my first effort. What happens when a sixteen-year-old girl and her eighteen-year-old adopted brother fall in love? "Annie and Will", a 106,000-word novel set in the 1960's, is a family drama that follows ...
- June 24th, 2011, 3:47 pm
- Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
- Topic: Coming of Middle Age, Contemporary Lesbian Romance
- Replies: 1
- Views: 1797
Re: Coming of Middle Age, Contemporary Lesbian Romance
Hi Gina, Wow - you've got a great premise going there. I recently completed my first novel and am waiting to hear back on my queries so I've got a little time to be a beta reader or critique partner. My story, "Annie and Will", describes what happens when a sixteen-year-old girl and her ei...
- June 13th, 2011, 12:42 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
- Replies: 3
- Views: 1889
Query - "Annie and Will" - A Family Drama
Dear Ms. Carson, What happens when a sixteen-year-old girl and her eighteen-year-old adopted brother fall in love? "Annie and Will", a 106,000-word novel set in the 1960's, is a family drama that follows the Gunderson family and the relationship between Annie and Will from Will's arrival a...
- June 13th, 2011, 11:33 am
- Forum: Town Hall
- Topic: The Introduction Thread
- Replies: 646
- Views: 403200
Re: The Introduction Thread
Hi - I'm John H. I retired from the telecommunications industry several years ago and moved to the mountains of PA to set about writing a novel. Three years later, I've got a completed manuscript and not a word back from the agents I've queried. The story is a family drama set in the Sixties and inv...
- June 13th, 2011, 11:21 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 451464
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
"Annie and Will" - Family Drama Novel Prologue The dying woman hugged her son closer to her as the train rattled on. “Are you felling better, Momma?” the boy asked. “A little, Will.” “Are we almost there, Momma?” “Almost,” she replied wearily. This was the third day of their trip and she w...
- June 13th, 2011, 11:13 am
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 213
- Views: 183291
Re: Nominate Your Query for a Critique on the Blog
Dear Ms. Carson, What happens when a sixteen-year-old girl and her eighteen-year-old adopted brother fall in love? "Annie and Will", a 106,000-word novel set in the 1960's, is a family drama that follows the Gunderson family and the relationship between Annie and Will from Will's arrival a...