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Crystal Clear and a sure hit.

Is Deep caves controlled by someone? Maybe, you give us a hint about the Deep Caves and its secrets.

-Regina

I love this Wingteeth. Maybe, use it in the first line to catch the attention of the agent right away. For a girl from Vegas, sixteen-year-old Adair is as lucky as cold dice. She lives in Mandalay Bay, sure, but the Bay hasn’t seen a high roller since the Last Recession of 2041, just an army of out...

Your query is short and sweet. Since you’ve expressed an interest in middle grade boy books, I think, it is understood. Maybe, compare your book with the books the agent repped. It will prove you have done your research I thought you might like. ESCAPE FROM THE UNDERGROUND CITY, a middle grade adven...

:D Thank you so much michelleimason. :D :roll: Revision # 2 :roll: Dear Agent, One rainy afternoon, Fiona Corolla opens the door to face her husband she killed one year ago. When documentary film maker Fiona Corolla interviews drug lord Wayne Vanderputt in a blood-stained cellar in suburban New York...

:D Thank you guys, thank you so much saraflower, wilderness, AllieS, Sleeping Beauty, michelleimason :D Noted down all the points, the frame, punctuation,reason for Wayne's 180,cliches, weak words As for the frame, I don't want to kill Wayne in one sentence and make him alive in the next sentence. L...

[quote="saraflower"]My first novel. It is a high fantasy story with a female protagonist. I appreciate all feedback given. :) Dear Agent, Kill. That is what warriors are supposed to do. They are not supposed to dream visions or fall for their worst enemy. Twenty-two year old Talya is a knight who li...

REVISED VERSION @ POST # 9 Dear Agent, Fiona Corolla screams when she opens the door to face her husband she killed one year ago. When documentary film maker Fiona Corolla interviews drug lord Wayne Vanderputt in a blood-stained cellar in suburban New York, she doesn't see Cupid's arrow aiming at h...