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- August 14th, 2011, 12:01 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Which Genre?
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2549
Re: Which Genre?
I think your best bet would be to label it "dystopian sci-fi," simply because the world is literally a "bad" (dys-) "place" (topos). One sci-fi book that this query reminds me of vaguely is "Parable of the Sower" by Octavia Butler -- it also reminds me of Mad ...
- August 5th, 2011, 12:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Untitled Contemporary Fiction
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2731
Re: Query: 'Barbarian' (WT): Contemporary Fiction
QUERY: In September of 2005, 13-year-old Casey Burbank died of drug overdose in her suburban home. At a party the night before, Izzie’s stepbrother Roan careful with name drops like this -- we don't know Izzie yet, and it's hard to keep a new name in mind when it's introducing a relationship met Ca...
- August 3rd, 2011, 4:25 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: DREAMSEA, YA Urban Fantasy
- Replies: 4
- Views: 1961
Query: DREAMSEA, YA Urban Fantasy
Hi everyone, I'm sending my second draft of the novel out to beta readers this month, so I thought I'd ask the forum for some help with this query letter. Any and all feedback is welcome. Thanks! ----- Dear [Agent] , On a bright summer day, a mysterious teenager appears in the ordinary town of Remin...
- August 3rd, 2011, 3:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: *Revised* QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR
- Replies: 40
- Views: 15080
Re: *Revised 3rd time* QUERY: THE DRAKE WAR
Dear Ms. Agent: When gun - toting maniacs barge into sixteen - year - old Lillim Callina’s home above poster is right: hyphenate and reveal an exciting opportunity to join an ancient, unstoppable dragon before it takes over the world, it means only one thing: She needs better locks. simplify: "...
- August 3rd, 2011, 2:10 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: *REVISED* Jade's Hurricane New Adult Fantasy
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2421
Re: Jade's Hurricane New Adult Fantasy
The wind is stupid. It just is. Not a bad opener, but in some sense, it doesn't get at the neater aspect of your story: Jade lives in a world where people ride the elements. Some possibilities for a first line opener: "The wind is stupid. It never does what she wants." could surprise us i...
- July 18th, 2011, 7:40 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
- Replies: 7
- Views: 3495
Re: MEETING OF THE WATERS - modern fantasy roadtrip
This covers a lot of ground. In terms of word count, I think you can actually expand -- which will clean up the density of this prose, which right now is going to sink you. I came up with a different version. I think this one's punchier: A fleet of time-traveling Nazis have has invaded the 17th cen...
- July 18th, 2011, 7:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: The Reception - Revised
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3436
Re: The Reception - First Attempt
******* Dear [AGENT], Autumn was supposed to be smart enough not to get herself stuck in the wall of a vacant house, but at twelve years old you are not always as smart as you, and perhaps everyone else , think s you are. She didn’t know what caused her to end up at the vacant house on that day. Whe...
- June 7th, 2011, 9:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: REDDO, YA Urban Fantasy LAST POST
- Replies: 20
- Views: 7865
Re: REDDO: New format for YA Urban Fantasy
I'm coming to this query letter late, but here's the version that I like best. Eighteen-year-old Sophie Rowan always hoped she had a true love. Hugh Kedoa, the new boy at school, says he can tell her if she has one. When Sophie finds Hugh injured far off the paths of Ellery Wildlife Preserve, he re...
- June 4th, 2011, 4:04 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query-YA paranormal thriller NEWEST ATTEMPT IN POST #16
- Replies: 18
- Views: 6649
Re: Query-YA paranormal thriller
This query is short enough (~241 words) that you could expand on this and still fit a single page comfortably. Here are my thoughts: I am seeking representation for CURSED, a 77,000 word paranormal thriller for young adults. Seventeen-year-old outcast Lysander Shore is determined to put an end to t...
- June 4th, 2011, 3:40 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Re: Query Help for The Engram Mystery
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2612
Re: Query Help for The Engram Mystery
Hi! I'm new here. My first instinct is that if the novel is at the same level of polish as this query, you'll need an experienced editor to get this novel even close to the possibility of publication, let alone probability. Dear Agent, Deep in the canyon of her soul is the spirit of a serial killer...
- June 4th, 2011, 3:27 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Totally New Query for MAGE STORM (MG Fantasy)
- Replies: 12
- Views: 4547
Re: Totally New Query for MAGE STORM (MG Fantasy)
Hi! I'm new here, but here are some of my thoughts on how to focus this query. My first instinct is that it is short and so you have some room to add more detail here. Or this one (different approach): Rell doesn't want magic. He doesn't dream of being a hero out of old legends or a mage. Certainly...
- June 4th, 2011, 3:13 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Happily Sometime After --YA Fantasy
- Replies: 9
- Views: 3767
Re: Happily Sometime After --YA Fantasy
Hi! I'm new here, but I thought I'd offer some observations I have that might make this piece really shine. Ok, some changes. ************** As a child Prince Lucien inadvertently caused the death of his older brother. Now he eagerly awaits his Quest where he can finally prove that he’s not the con...