Why is Adam the protagonist and not Lea?
What is his motivation for helping her so much?
What is his conflict? Which critical decision he has to make?
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- May 23rd, 2011, 10:11 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - Moonlight Falters (new version at page 2)
- Replies: 19
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- May 23rd, 2011, 10:04 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: NOCTURNAL, psychological thriller
- Replies: 6
- Views: 2838
Re: NOCTURNAL, psychological thriller
The story sounds very interesting!
I think you should explain why he feels he's becoming crazy- the story is special because of his mental progress, not only his concrete findings, and that should get more weight.
I think you should explain why he feels he's becoming crazy- the story is special because of his mental progress, not only his concrete findings, and that should get more weight.
- May 23rd, 2011, 9:44 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query / synopsis :: MASQUERADE
- Replies: 9
- Views: 4116
Re: Query / synopsis :: MASQUERADE UPDATED (5/11)
Jake Wilson has just discovered that he has been assigned a project at work with his evil, red-headed -not adding anything important ex-girlfriend. This is not just any ex-girlfriend. This is the ex-girlfriend. She’s the benchmark, but she also has a bad habit of showing up at the worst times … or ...
- May 23rd, 2011, 9:29 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE ENEMY WITHIN (Historical Fiction): New Version - Page 3
- Replies: 41
- Views: 15722
Re: New Query: THE ENEMY WITHIN (Historical Fiction)
I think this is much better than the former - you begin right in the action. "not realizing that he has been charged with apprehending Confederate spies and sympathizers" and "Then she discovers her husband is in the employ of the Union government" is saying the same thing twice....