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In general, I liked the first more than the second, but it could use some tweeks. Such a cool story idea though! Any comments/thoughts/suggestions/etc are welcome! :) Señor Rossi saved Belén when she was nine, and remains a family friend. Nothing would shake that bond, until Ale appears. Ale is the ...
- May 15th, 2011, 12:25 pm
- Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
- Topic: Revised: Statute of Treasons - Synopsis (30% fewer words)
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Wow! What a cool, intricate story! I'm new at commenting, but wanted to share some ideas for tightening up the first paragraph. There is a grammar mistake that threw me off, and a tone that doesn't fit the rest of the synopsis. It is 1644, and Parliament’s armies have laid siege to the royalist stro...