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by JessePrice
April 23rd, 2011, 1:56 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Blood Legacy - YA Fantasy REVISED
Replies: 21
Views: 3640

Re: REVISED Re: Query: Blood Legacy - YA Fantasy

Revised queries Query Version 2 (352 words) Dear [Agent], The people of Dereshan have waited centuries for their saviour, a child with two-toned eyes and the heir of the last dragon queen. But for Dani Strider, ignorant of her heritage after growing up on earth, the uncontrolled magic coursing thro...
by JessePrice
April 23rd, 2011, 1:22 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query - In the Shadow of the Dragon King
Replies: 13
Views: 2455

Re: Query - In the Shadow of the Dragon King

Hi guys: I would love some feedback on this query for my YA contemporary fantasy. Thank you so much. Dear Agent’s Name: A rash of murders has plunged the realm of Fallhollow into chaos. Now the fate of its greatest kingdom rests on the shoulders of an unsuspecting How is he unsuspecting? Is this a ...
by JessePrice
April 21st, 2011, 11:37 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query TORN YA sci fi
Replies: 6
Views: 1297

Re: Query TORN YA sci fi

Here's my latest attempt: Dear Super Star Agent: TORN is a young adult science fiction complete at 87,000 words. Sixteen year old Julia Phillips buries herself in guilt Being nit-picky here, but how does she bury herself in guilt? Doing what? This just seems vague, although I like the overall timbr...
by JessePrice
April 21st, 2011, 4:27 pm
Forum: Writing
Topic: Separating confidence from self-doubt
Replies: 5
Views: 2659

Re: Separating confidence from self-doubt

So, now, my beta readers have started reading my first book --- which I have put through so many rounds of edits that I can recall most of the sentences from it by memory --- and they keep telling me they love it. One person told me they read the entire thing in one afternoon because he couldn't pu...
by JessePrice
April 21st, 2011, 1:22 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Blood Legacy - YA Query REVISED x1
Replies: 6
Views: 1221

Re: Blood Legacy - YA Query

While trying to write my last query letter I realised my story needs to be revised in a whole new direction. I've rewritten the query from scratch with the new direction in mind. I'm still struggling with length. Please don't be afraid to be brutal. I need it. Dear [Agent], I am a regular reader of...