Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I've been sending out queries for the past month or so with no success. Any pointers? Tips? Advice? Thanks in advance. Some say Lewis and his family are among the lucky ones. After all, they survived the Demon hordes of World War III with their mansion and wealth intact. Sixteen-year-old Lewis, howe...

Please let me know how this works for you. I'm always very skittish about sharing my writing but I suppose getting some feedback couldn't hurt. I also recently submitted this along with a snyopsis after a partial request, and got turned down (of course, I submitted all three chapters, but I'm not ab...

Falls Apart wrote:Personally, I like the first version best. It sets a good tone.

Agreed. The second one seems to be too "wordy" and beats around the bush too much. Also, be careful of the references to popular works (Devil Wears Prada). I understand the reference, but some agents seem to look down on it.

I would greatly appreciate any time taken to critique my query thus far. I will gladly return the favor, as well. When Adam travels to Hayesfield to live with his grandparents, he feels as if his luck couldn't get much worse. Now, in addition to struggling with the suicide of his best (and only) fri...