Search found 11 matches
- March 14th, 2011, 7:56 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy - newest version in post 16
- Replies: 15
- Views: 7071
Re: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy
this sounds very interesting to me! it sounds like it the book has a 'fun' element in it (perfect recipe) and "Astec style''. If that fits your writing, leave it for sure,but just wondered if was true b/c i think the query is supposed to reflect the tone of the book. the query is tight and to t...
- March 14th, 2011, 7:56 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy - newest version in post 16
- Replies: 15
- Views: 7071
Re: Query - The Cacao Conspiracy
this sounds very interesting to me! it sounds like it the book has a 'fun' element in it (perfect recipe) and "Astec style''. If that fits your writing, leave it for sure,but just wondered if was true b/c i think the query is supposed to reflect the tone of the book. the query is tight and to t...
- March 11th, 2011, 8:46 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: REDEMPTION FOR LIARS - Edited
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4588
Re: Query: REDEMPTION FOR LIARS
I have two versions of my query letter but am unsure of which would be the best one to send out. Please be brutally honest. ok i chopped and deleted and questioned, but not sure i did it right at all, so take it with a grain of salt. i love the way the sentences flow and have a taste of the book i t...
- March 11th, 2011, 8:30 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Divisions REVISED
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2587
Re: Query: Divisions REVISED
enewmeyer, thanks for reading my query. i think divisions would be women's fiction. lang is a loner, and must learn to open herself to people now that her husband and sole friend is dead. critical of her granddaughters mother b/c she won't marry Lang's son, Lang has to accept her when she finds out ...
- March 10th, 2011, 8:27 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: FYI You guys are AWESOME!
- Replies: 10
- Views: 3873
Re: FYI You guys are AWESOME!
Yay!!! That's great news!
- March 3rd, 2011, 4:45 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
- Replies: 27
- Views: 9848
Re: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
I switched bits and pieces, but think this sounds like a great query for a great book! Query 1 Sam Oliveira can barely make it through a day without succumbing to gut-wrenching visions. Glimpsing natural disasters and terrorist attacks before they happen leaves him with a pounding migraine and his h...
- February 28th, 2011, 12:21 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: THE DIM MAN
- Replies: 14
- Views: 6053
Re: Query: THE DIM MAN
Tim Manning has no soul. Or at least that’s what the latest popular computer application says. (Battling?) a worsening and debilitating heart problem, Tim has no desire to participate in the pop culture phenomenon obsessed with his unique soul score. At first, the successful funeral director ignores...
- February 28th, 2011, 7:52 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Divisions REVISED
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2587
Re: Query: Divisions
thank you so much! i am going back to the 'drawing board' and really appreciate the help and insights.
- February 27th, 2011, 3:06 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: Divisions REVISED
- Replies: 7
- Views: 2587
Query: Divisions REVISED
round 2! thanks so much for any input on this. i really appreciate it. Dear: Because you so successfully represent women’s fiction, I hope you will be interested in my novel, DIVISIONS, complete at 81,000 words. Just as she is celebrating her one-year survival of pancreatic cancer, sixty-five year o...
- February 27th, 2011, 2:54 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8335
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
this sounds like a tight, face-paced, interesting read. i'm new at this, so please take my comments with the whole shaker of salt. the italisized words confuse me cypress village sentence awkward In his world, where everything is based on hard facts, Detective Alex Mendez learns the hard way that no...
- February 27th, 2011, 2:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: ANTEDILUVIAN query
- Replies: 41
- Views: 14163
Re: ANTEDILUVIAN query
I am brand new to this forum, so please take my comments with a grain of salt: I think the bible verse reminds me of a prologue, a big no-no with agents, and doesn't interest me nearly as much as the first paragraph. wonder if you could delete 'though' in the second paragrah, keep the momentum going...