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- February 26th, 2011, 9:17 am
- Forum: Finding An Agent
- Topic: Taking the Plunge
- Replies: 3
- Views: 2821
Re: Taking the Plunge
Good luck Steph! Tell us how it goes!
- February 26th, 2011, 9:14 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
- Replies: 27
- Views: 9827
Re: Query: SAW IT COMING (revised)
I love the new version... maybe sleeping on it warmed me up to the drug lord :P And I still like the barfing, so I guess it's just to each their own! I feel like without the barfing Sam sounds serious and boring... I know that vomit shouldn't make such difference in a character, but it does for me i...
- February 25th, 2011, 4:44 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
- Replies: 27
- Views: 9827
Re: Query: SAW IT COMING
I'd also go with version 1, it's fresher, tighter, and it intrigues me more! To be honest, I think it's pretty great as-is. I like a lot of Quill's suggestions, primarily the paragraph about gabby. However, I like your original paragraph better as-is, I like the voice, he sounds like a teen, and I f...
- February 24th, 2011, 10:49 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: VANGUARD query
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2189
Re: VANGUARD query
I also think this is an interesting premise, and I am a sucker for romance! Here are some general observations... -I find the made-up country names distracting. They sound more like fantasy realms, and even though you only mentioned two, I was already getting confused... which makes me think that I'...
- February 24th, 2011, 12:02 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: THE DIM- New Query
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3153
Re: THE DIM- New Query
Wow, the latest draft included most of the suggestions I was going to make! Here's what I have left after Quill's great run-throughs... The query makes it seem like most of this book takes place in the present day. Is that the case? What catches my interest about this query (besides the guy from the...