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by queryguppy
February 26th, 2011, 9:17 am
Forum: Finding An Agent
Topic: Taking the Plunge
Replies: 3
Views: 1258

Re: Taking the Plunge

Good luck Steph! Tell us how it goes!
by queryguppy
February 26th, 2011, 9:14 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
Replies: 27
Views: 4405

Re: Query: SAW IT COMING (revised)

I love the new version... maybe sleeping on it warmed me up to the drug lord :P And I still like the barfing, so I guess it's just to each their own! I feel like without the barfing Sam sounds serious and boring... I know that vomit shouldn't make such difference in a character, but it does for me i...
by queryguppy
February 25th, 2011, 4:44 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: SAW IT COMING (new ending paragraph)
Replies: 27
Views: 4405

Re: Query: SAW IT COMING

I'd also go with version 1, it's fresher, tighter, and it intrigues me more! To be honest, I think it's pretty great as-is. I like a lot of Quill's suggestions, primarily the paragraph about gabby. However, I like your original paragraph better as-is, I like the voice, he sounds like a teen, and I f...
by queryguppy
February 24th, 2011, 10:49 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: VANGUARD query
Replies: 5
Views: 875

Re: VANGUARD query

I also think this is an interesting premise, and I am a sucker for romance! Here are some general observations... -I find the made-up country names distracting. They sound more like fantasy realms, and even though you only mentioned two, I was already getting confused... which makes me think that I'...
by queryguppy
February 24th, 2011, 12:02 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: THE DIM- New Query
Replies: 8
Views: 1242

Re: THE DIM- New Query

Wow, the latest draft included most of the suggestions I was going to make! Here's what I have left after Quill's great run-throughs... The query makes it seem like most of this book takes place in the present day. Is that the case? What catches my interest about this query (besides the guy from the...