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by itobias
June 27th, 2018, 8:43 am
Forum: Excerpts
Topic: Hunted Chapter 1........ 1st 500 Words
Replies: 1
Views: 130

Hunted Chapter 1........ 1st 500 Words

Hunted Chapter 1 London 1715 As the rain has one character and the wind another, it is the fog that shrouds them both in mystery. Peter Gray is my name. Of late I am known as Henry Crum. The quality of my life has become a distant glimmer of former aspirations, causing my true name and identity to b...
by itobias
November 19th, 2016, 10:34 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Bleamy's Corner
Replies: 1
Views: 4271

Bleamy's Corner

Eleven-year-old Jeremy is heartbroken at leaving his dog and friends behind when the 1802 Scotland drought forces his family to move to London. Too soon, he watches his father die of consumption. A night later, he follows his mother's lonely footprints in the snow where they end at the edge of Londo...
by itobias
April 29th, 2013, 12:12 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel
Replies: 2
Views: 3344

Re: Looking for a CP for a YA fantasy novel

I would be interested. Yours sounds interesting. I have a YA novel, Bleamy's Corner, that was refected by an interested agent because the YA voice was not right. I need to take out my adult voice and make it that of a bright twelve year old. Inserting (almost used interested again...) the first chap...
by itobias
April 2nd, 2013, 1:56 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER
Replies: 4
Views: 4668

Query: THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDER

In 1665 London, Brimley Tinderbuss writes sharp criticisms of King Charles II's tax-heavy reign. His treasonous words earn him popularity and a possible date with the hangman, but no financial reward. Despite this, he remains optimistic and continues to write scathing reviews of the King's edicts. W...
by itobias
February 16th, 2013, 6:26 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query-Historicl Fiction- Hunted
Replies: 2
Views: 1980

Query-Historicl Fiction- Hunted

Hunted In 1705 London, Peter Gray thinks life couldn't get any tougher, until authorities jail him and his family in debtors' prison because of a shady business deal engineered by Lord Banks. Peter escapes and plans to do whatever it takes to release his family from prison and prove Lord Banks a lia...
by itobias
July 8th, 2012, 4:47 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Wilma's War
Replies: 2
Views: 786

Query: Wilma's War

Any help on this? Thanks! Wilma Dern runs mining outpost Chezneck 4 on the Ribaldune Road. It is a combination hotel and refitting post on the planet Jangeroo. She is a strong blonde beauty by all standards, human or alien. Long tired of what that has brought her: three bad marriages and one child k...
by itobias
May 22nd, 2012, 4:42 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Hunted
Replies: 1
Views: 1181

Query: Hunted

Need some help. Thanks! In 1705 London, Peter Gray thought life can't get any tougher until he, and family are locked away in debtors' prison. His fathers business partner, Lord Banks, has unscrupulously laid a massive debt upon him in a rigged deal. Now he has a fight on his hands and it will take ...
by itobias
March 24th, 2012, 3:50 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction
Replies: 6
Views: 2760

Re: Looking for a Critique Partner for Literary Fiction

I may be interested? We can swap first pages to see if we match.
Tobias
by itobias
March 12th, 2012, 10:41 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner
Replies: 3
Views: 1527

Any Better? Query: Bleamy's Corner

In the drought of 1802, the crops fail on the Bleamy family farm in Kilmnark, Scotland, forcing eleven-year old Jeremy Bleamy and his parents to leave their belongings, their dog, Gulliver and their memories behind and head toward London to find a better life. But all Jeremy finds is dishonesty, vio...
by itobias
March 31st, 2011, 5:16 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Treasure
Replies: 2
Views: 653

Treasure

Critique please. Dear , When young Sam runs away from home, he never imagined the perils he faced at the hands of his Aunt and Uncle on the rough streets of 1840’s London would be eclipsed by the journey his life was about to take him on. Survival had its price and he lost all his friends Years late...
by itobias
March 31st, 2011, 12:53 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB
Replies: 6
Views: 1190

Re: Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB

Better?? In 1665 London, Brimley openly criticizes King Charles II's heavy tax rule with his public writings. Though his treasonous words make him popular among the masses, it doesn't pay well and may cost him his head. He continues writing despite the threat and has high hopes for prestige and fina...
by itobias
March 29th, 2011, 11:22 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Critique Partner
Replies: 2
Views: 1085

Re: Critique Partner

Treasure. (Historical fiction complete at 120,000 words) When young Sam runs away from home, he does not realize the hardships he faced at the hands of his Aunt, Uncle, and the rough streets of 1840’s London are nothing compared to the peril’s his life is put to at the hands of the sea, sailors, and...
by itobias
March 28th, 2011, 7:42 pm
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Critique Partner
Replies: 2
Views: 1085

Critique Partner

I have several historical fiction novels that need to be read and critiqued.
Bleamy's Corner and Treasure.
by itobias
March 28th, 2011, 11:16 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB
Replies: 6
Views: 1190

Re: Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB

New version: In 1665 London, Brimley openly criticizes King Charle's II's heavy tax rule with his public writings. Though his treasonous words make him popular among the masses, it doesn't pay well and may cost him his head. Brimley continues writing despite the threat and has high hopes for prestig...
by itobias
March 27th, 2011, 11:04 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB
Replies: 6
Views: 1190

Query-THE GREAT TURBULENCE AND MALCONTENT OF BRIMLEY TINDERB

Is it too long? What else is wrong? In 1665 London, Brimley Tinderbuss after escaping three marriages falls in love with writing. The political times lure him to seditious prose, as King Charles II's tax heavy rule, makes a great target for Brimley's treasonous words. Unfortunately it does not pay a...