Nathan Bransford - The Forums

I found my critique group through a Facebook friend from high school. We'd been out of touch for years, found out we lived like 10 miles from each other. She had a writing group and asked me to join. Each month a different person is in charge of coming up with the writing assignment. We have to emai...

Much improved!
Good luck
Tricia

Chris first off I think that the query is too long. That first paragraph a tidbit will do. One short sentence why you chose him. I hope you find something to love in The Guns of Pleasure and Death, my 100,000 word steampunk fantasy set in an alternate history where advanced clockwork and steam-power...

I have a couple things to add. Choose one tense. Read your writing out loud and you'll find mistakes. Don't add extra words. an event that caused her to transport to Ancient Egypt. an event transports her to Also if your story starts with the dream or Grey waking up you may want to rethink that. Fro...