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by GaoYuQing
May 24th, 2012, 8:02 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Contemporary Fiction - 'Jigsaw Boy'
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

Re: YA Contemporary Fiction - 'Jigsaw Boy'

It's concise, but perhaps you've made it too much so. We don't want a synopsis, but perhaps give us a bit more to work with. Are there any other major plot events? Tease us with a little more info to bring us in and want to read this story. Right now you spend more time talking about yourself than y...
by GaoYuQing
May 23rd, 2012, 8:43 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Query: Hunted
Replies: 1
Views: 1297

Re: Query: Hunted

Ok first this comes off as more of a synopsis than a query. At this point the only reason we would read the book now would be to fill in the details. Also, I warn you now, there are a TON of grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc errors in this letter. If you sent something this rough it would be the k...
by GaoYuQing
May 23rd, 2012, 7:45 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: YA Contemporary Fiction - 'Jigsaw Boy'
Replies: 6
Views: 1908

Re: YA Contemporary Fiction - 'Jigsaw Boy'

Wow, a teenager writing this? Very impressive. I know my first attempt at a query wasn't this good :) Dear Agent, I am currently seeking representation for JIGSAW BOY, my contemporary young adult novel, complete at 46,000 words. It will appeal to fans of Malorie Blackman, who also approaches serious...
by GaoYuQing
May 21st, 2012, 8:49 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Born to Bondage query - Revised final-updated 5/15/12
Replies: 10
Views: 3110

Re: Born to Bondage query - Revised final-updated 5/15/12

Thanks for the feedback. I’m glad I included the potion bit too as its effects really are the source of the most immediate dramatic change in the MC and the source of many minor changes in the following novels. To say more would give too much away, but I think it needed to be included. I hadn’t orig...
by GaoYuQing
May 16th, 2012, 10:54 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group
Replies: 50
Views: 21274

Re: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group

Well I'm new to this whole field so we'll see. Kinda going by feel here :) What I liked about the sound of DII was, actually, the stringency required by the group. You have to do at least 2 crits of at least 250 words each every month or you're kicked out. For every submission of your own you have t...
by GaoYuQing
May 16th, 2012, 10:48 am
Forum: Synopses and Plot Outlines
Topic: Trees
Replies: 0
Views: 6205

Re: Trees

I think you wanted to post this in the query or synopsis thread.
by GaoYuQing
May 16th, 2012, 10:41 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Suspense Query- The Verge
Replies: 8
Views: 2125

Re: Suspense Query- The Verge

Ok, I didn't read the previous versions or the comments, so I'll be doing my best to address this on its own merit. I've taken some of the proffered advice for this next attempt- is this any better? __________________________________ In The Verge , a suspense at 86,000 words, Angela Sheppard has one...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 2:07 pm
Forum: Queries
Topic: Born to Bondage query - Revised final-updated 5/15/12
Replies: 10
Views: 3110

Re: Born to Bondage query - Revised final-updated 5/10/12

Ok, taking into consideration the previous comments as well as my "gut" as to what details I really want to focus the story on--at risk of making it seem as if there's not a lot of action, here we go. (I don't know if there's a time limit you're supposed to wait out before reposting, but once my min...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 11:41 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group
Replies: 50
Views: 21274

Re: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group

Thanks. I think I may pass for the first book, but come revisit this for the second. Don't know when that will be though. Might be sooner rather than later. I'm currently bouncing between revising the second, while polishing the first and don't want to overextend myself. I'm considering applying to ...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 10:27 am
Forum: Connect With a Critique Partner
Topic: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group
Replies: 50
Views: 21274

Re: Contructing a Fantasy Super writing group

Well I'm interested, though I confess I'm a little confused about how this would all work, being unfamiliar with the lecture series in question. Perhaps you could give a quick walkthrough of how this exchange would work? I'm kind of with Joe though, I feel like I'm in the final polishing stage befor...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 10:10 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: Combine the Last Movie You Saw and the Last Book You Read
Replies: 5
Views: 1851

Re: Combine the Last Movie You Saw and the Last Book You Read

Thor and "Before the Beginning." Superhero movie and book about quantum physics and astrophysics... >.> Though actually, they did have references to wormholes, etc in the movie...so maybe it's a better fit than you might think.
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 10:08 am
Forum: Procrastination
Topic: What pays your rent?
Replies: 39
Views: 10274

Re: What pays your rent?

I'm the lead Microbiologist at a start-up pharmaceutical manufacturing facility.
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 10:04 am
Forum: Writing
Topic: Of the characters you've written, who is your favorite?
Replies: 41
Views: 11296

Re: Of the characters you've written, who is your favorite?

Ugh...I have a couple series I'm working on, at least mentally, though one has taken a backseat for the time being. Series 1 is probably Dawn, my "savior/demigod" character. http://nadezhdavasile.deviantart.com/art/Commission-Dawn-176030580?q=favby%3Agaoyuqing%2F2541131&qo=12 Series 2 is probably Ka...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 9:39 am
Forum: Books
Topic: Do you read indie/self-pubbed books?
Replies: 11
Views: 2606

Re: Do you read indie/self-pubbed books?

I'm afraid I'm a bit of a Luddite when it comes to books. I utterly refuse to get a e-reader, on principle alone and for other, practicle reasons it's irrelevant to mention. I therefore have never read a self-published book in that format. I have read a couple physical books that were self published...
by GaoYuQing
May 15th, 2012, 9:31 am
Forum: Queries
Topic: Revised Query: Brotherly Love
Replies: 2
Views: 941

Re: Query: Brotherly Love

Would be very appreciative of feedback on this: Dear Ms. The girl and her adopted brother became best friends as children, fell in love as teenagers, and had their lives wrenched apart by unjust circumstances in the end. BROTHERLY LOVE is the story of one man’s greed, another man’s failure to save ...