Nathan Bransford - The Forums

It's concise, but perhaps you've made it too much so. We don't want a synopsis, but perhaps give us a bit more to work with. Are there any other major plot events? Tease us with a little more info to bring us in and want to read this story. Right now you spend more time talking about yourself than y...

Ok first this comes off as more of a synopsis than a query. At this point the only reason we would read the book now would be to fill in the details. Also, I warn you now, there are a TON of grammar, spelling, punctuation, etc errors in this letter. If you sent something this rough it would be the k...

Wow, a teenager writing this? Very impressive. I know my first attempt at a query wasn't this good :) Dear Agent, I am currently seeking representation for JIGSAW BOY, my contemporary young adult novel, complete at 46,000 words. It will appeal to fans of Malorie Blackman, who also approaches serious...

Thanks for the feedback. I’m glad I included the potion bit too as its effects really are the source of the most immediate dramatic change in the MC and the source of many minor changes in the following novels. To say more would give too much away, but I think it needed to be included. I hadn’t orig...

Well I'm new to this whole field so we'll see. Kinda going by feel here :) What I liked about the sound of DII was, actually, the stringency required by the group. You have to do at least 2 crits of at least 250 words each every month or you're kicked out. For every submission of your own you have t...

I think you wanted to post this in the query or synopsis thread.

Ok, I didn't read the previous versions or the comments, so I'll be doing my best to address this on its own merit. I've taken some of the proffered advice for this next attempt- is this any better? __________________________________ In The Verge , a suspense at 86,000 words, Angela Sheppard has one...

Ok, taking into consideration the previous comments as well as my "gut" as to what details I really want to focus the story on--at risk of making it seem as if there's not a lot of action, here we go. (I don't know if there's a time limit you're supposed to wait out before reposting, but once my min...

Thanks. I think I may pass for the first book, but come revisit this for the second. Don't know when that will be though. Might be sooner rather than later. I'm currently bouncing between revising the second, while polishing the first and don't want to overextend myself. I'm considering applying to ...

Well I'm interested, though I confess I'm a little confused about how this would all work, being unfamiliar with the lecture series in question. Perhaps you could give a quick walkthrough of how this exchange would work? I'm kind of with Joe though, I feel like I'm in the final polishing stage befor...

Thor and "Before the Beginning." Superhero movie and book about quantum physics and astrophysics... >.> Though actually, they did have references to wormholes, etc in the movie...so maybe it's a better fit than you might think.

I'm the lead Microbiologist at a start-up pharmaceutical manufacturing facility.

Ugh...I have a couple series I'm working on, at least mentally, though one has taken a backseat for the time being. Series 1 is probably Dawn, my "savior/demigod" character. http://nadezhdavasile.deviantart.com/art/Commission-Dawn-176030580?q=favby%3Agaoyuqing%2F2541131&qo=12 Series 2 is probably Ka...

I'm afraid I'm a bit of a Luddite when it comes to books. I utterly refuse to get a e-reader, on principle alone and for other, practicle reasons it's irrelevant to mention. I therefore have never read a self-published book in that format. I have read a couple physical books that were self published...

Would be very appreciative of feedback on this: Dear Ms. The girl and her adopted brother became best friends as children, fell in love as teenagers, and had their lives wrenched apart by unjust circumstances in the end. BROTHERLY LOVE is the story of one man’s greed, another man’s failure to save ...