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- April 19th, 2011, 5:42 pm
- Forum: Procrastination
- Topic: I'm moving out!
- Replies: 26
- Views: 9640
Re: I'm moving out!
Heh, I remember the first place I moved into and didn't have a roommate. I slowly walked the tiny apartment and pointed at stuff- That's my cabinet. I can put anything I want on that wall. The oven is solely in my domain. Who's sink is that? Oh yeah, MINE. Well, none of that was true, it was an apar...
- April 5th, 2011, 2:16 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: Word Count?
- Replies: 24
- Views: 11060
Re: Word Count?
I think it helps to pay attention to word count. If I'm aiming for 80,000 words, then I know act 2 needs to start around the 20,000 mark, act 3 around 60,000, etc. So if I'm only at 12,000 words and I'm almost to the part I've designated as the first plot point, then I know I'm probably writing too ...
- February 20th, 2011, 3:59 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Born to Bondage query II
- Replies: 23
- Views: 9417
Re: Born to Bondage query II
I wanted to mention something regarding the diverse critiques you've been getting. I've been in a ton of writers' workshops and I have a pretty good method to weeding through critiques. If one person tells you a particular thing is wrong with your novel/query, feel free to ignore it (unless of cours...
- February 17th, 2011, 6:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Born to Bondage query II
- Replies: 23
- Views: 9417
Re: Born to Bondage query II
Welcome to the forums GaoYuQing! I'll throw a critique your way. Things I take issue with are in red , my thoughts as I read are in blue . Paul Neilsson is a broken man . This is a tad cliche, plus it's telling us, not showing us. But this is a query, hard to get through it without telling. His job,...
- February 16th, 2011, 1:57 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8730
Re: One more time
Heh, guess I'll give this another shot, though you'd probably be better off getting a wider variety of opinions. I suggest critiquing other people's queries in this forum, I think that back-scratching mentality is what keeps the back-and-forth alive. (If you've already done a bunch of critiques, the...
- February 16th, 2011, 1:31 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: A Practice Pattern Model
- Replies: 2
- Views: 1577
Re: A Practice Pattern Model
A Practice Pattern Model patterns a scale of practices measuring inputs and outcomes. A bad practice is one with dangerous and inefficient practices resulting in irrecoverable losses and task failure. A poor practice is one with dangerous and/or inefficient practices resulting in acceptable task co...
- February 16th, 2011, 1:16 pm
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Great Gatsby Video Game
- Replies: 6
- Views: 3341
Re: Great Gatsby Video Game
This just caught Game Informer's attention. Thought I'd share the link-
http://www.gameinformer.com/b/news/arch ... aying.aspx
http://www.gameinformer.com/b/news/arch ... aying.aspx
- February 14th, 2011, 1:56 am
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Habit: skipping parts or passages in a novel
- Replies: 53
- Views: 21681
Re: Habit: skipping parts or passages in a novel
Why is this hard to understand? There are writers who get carried away with the poetry of their own prose but otherwise are great writers. There are writers who rush to meet deadlines or to write 2-3 novels and a couple of novellas a year. There are writers who think that because they are establish...
- February 13th, 2011, 2:47 pm
- Forum: Books
- Topic: Habit: skipping parts or passages in a novel
- Replies: 53
- Views: 21681
Re: Habit: skipping parts or passages in a novel
When I first saw Steve's post here, I thought, 'Wow, this is a non-issue. Who in the hell skips portions of the book they're reading? Nobody does that.' But apparently I'm wrong. For the love of god, why? If passages are boring you, just put that sucker down and grab another book. You people fast-fo...
- February 12th, 2011, 1:00 pm
- Forum: Writing
- Topic: When there's nothing going on...
- Replies: 13
- Views: 4226
Re: When there's nothing going on...
Since it's the start of the novel, I suggest character development. Get your MC to point B by putting him/her in an interesting situation that shows off who this person is.
Have it move the plot along and you get bonus points :)
Have it move the plot along and you get bonus points :)
- February 11th, 2011, 12:03 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8289
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
Detective Alex Mendez built his career on irrefutable facts. Now, a sociopathic forensic nurse turns Alex’s life up-side-down when she plants her cheating boyfriend’s semen into the evidence kits from three rape victims. I like this a lot better. It sets everything up, it's specific. Though I agree...
- February 10th, 2011, 2:51 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8289
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
I think you're having a problem fully conveying your plot. We need a firm grasp on what the story is about, what the motivations are, and who's doing what to whom. I'm going to put my thoughts down as I read. Dear Agent, In his world, where everything is built on fact, Detective Alex Mendez discover...
- February 10th, 2011, 12:20 pm
- Forum: Books
- Topic: THE GREAT GATSBY
- Replies: 5
- Views: 2691
Re: THE GREAT GATSBY
I had a bad experience with THE GREAT GATSBY, but I blame myself. I think I read it late in high school or my freshmen year of college. I remember the teacher telling us it was one of the greatest books ever written, but it bored me. I'd say maybe it was built up too much, but I was probably too inv...
- February 9th, 2011, 4:24 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK - take 3
- Replies: 21
- Views: 8730
Re: Query feedback - THE HEAVY DARK
Beneath airships and mountainous cathedrals, through the streets of a walled city, Skyla runs for her life. I agree with Ermo. The sentence placement is jarring. It might be better to begin with the second paragraph, then move into how witches aren't popular (and give us more reason as to why!) and...
- February 5th, 2011, 9:39 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Non-fiction Query: English Lessons
- Replies: 8
- Views: 3526
Re: Non-fiction Query: English Lessons
Wow. Honestly, this doesn't need much work, if any at all. You've presented yourself quite professionally, and it sounds like a great read. If I were an agent, I'd ask for a partial. And I'm picky as shit. But you asked for a critique! All I can do is nitpick. But since this is already so tight, if ...