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- February 17th, 2011, 3:00 pm
- Forum: Nominate Your Query or First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Topic: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
- Replies: 720
- Views: 452013
Re: Nominate Your First Page for a Critique on the Blog
Title: The Last Symphony of Juan Garcia Genre: Literary commercial fiction Word Count: 232 Not many people have seen the Los Angeles Philharmonic perform in the middle of a freshly plowed field in front of migrant farm workers, but Juan Garcia had seen it fifteen times. He took his seat in the front...
- February 2nd, 2011, 6:14 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Wonderful, exceptional comments! Your insight is helping me see angles and weaknesses I hadn't seen previously. I will be using your comments as a reference for future query revisions. Thanks so much!! It is so valuable!!!
- February 1st, 2011, 5:48 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Completely agree with everything you said! Dig the lingo, too! Haha! :) And thanks a millions for these additional links, I wasn't aware of a few of those, and will use them to the max! I think I'm getting more excited about working with an agent and having that extra support, assuming I can land on...
- January 31st, 2011, 9:32 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Definitely agree with you there. And yeah I've been using query tracker and the AAR site, but I welcome any and all referrals to other sites you use as well. Thanks! :)
- January 31st, 2011, 7:55 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Yep, I'm going to give the agenting route a shot, and exhaust that option (which will take awhile since there are so many agents out there and because it takes a lot of time to hear back from them, etc.) before considering the next step. I've always been partial to the idea of working with an agent,...
- January 31st, 2011, 5:16 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Haha, what a great turn of events and anecdote (Wife Swap and the courthouse encounter)! So very serendipitous! It made me smile reading that! (and reading your sincere words of encouragement)
- January 30th, 2011, 8:15 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Haha, like the phrase, "pardon my American." Haha. You came across as very sincere, Mary-Catharine (oh and by the way, your name rocks!), and I REALLY appreciated your encouragement. Critique is certainly helpful for all of us, and yep we all should take things with various grains of salt,...
- January 28th, 2011, 10:19 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8284
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
You're definitely doing something right. I think it's a strong query. I'm not an expert (or an agent) so I hope I didn't come across as discouraging. Now that I have few more minutes to spare, let me clarify what I was referring to when I said pruning/trimming. Really, I was only referring to a few ...
- January 28th, 2011, 7:23 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query: IRREFUTABLE
- Replies: 19
- Views: 8284
Re: Query: IRREFUTABLE
Love the title! I just have a few seconds here, so I'll just make one small suggestion for this sentence: "A serial rapist is active in Cypress Village and the victims are among the town's most affluent women." Instead, perhaps: "A serial rapist in Cypress Village is targeting the tow...
- January 28th, 2011, 7:09 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Nightframe Query
- Replies: 11
- Views: 4190
Re: Nightframe Query
First of all, congrats for completing this novel -- 120,000 words no less. That in itself is an amazing feat. The second from last query was my favorite...this one: "Brody thinks I’m a hero—but, of course, love is blind. He can’t see what I truly am: a werewolf. I know that one day I won’t be a...
- January 28th, 2011, 12:13 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Here's another version of the query...the result of meditating on all of the feedback I've received so far. Again, I want to say how grateful I am to those who took their time to critique. It gives me hope. Speaking of hope, I added a little poetic flourish in "Hope arrives with the sound of a ...
- January 28th, 2011, 11:35 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
You raise some very interesting points, Holly. And your closing advice really hit home for me because I have SUCH a problem with patience...I just have a compulsion to shoot out queries, haha. I also see your point about the over-abundance of negativity and lack of hope...I remember an agent recentl...
- January 28th, 2011, 2:05 am
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
WOW...thank you Quill! I really appreciate your time and effort in helping me improve this query. Haha, I actually think replacing my Lainey character with the revived cryogenic remains of Walt Disney would make one heck of a novel. I've taken your improvements and worked hard on a new version. I ob...
- January 27th, 2011, 8:28 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Woohoo! I did a happy dance when I read your comment. Thanks Evelyn!!!! I wish you the best.
- January 27th, 2011, 5:14 pm
- Forum: Queries
- Topic: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
- Replies: 24
- Views: 8264
Re: Query for THE LAST SYMPHONY OF JUAN GARCIA
Wow, query tracker does indeed sound fantastic! Can't wait to check it out! And it's comforting to know there is at least a contest to enter, if the worst case scenario happens. It's comforting to have rejection contingencies, haha. Thanks again, Holly.